You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You have decided to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain what experience and special skills you have - explain why you are interested in the job
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently seen your job advertisementnoticed a job advertisement in a local newspaper for the shop assistant positionsales executive position in the City Museum shop. I would like to apply for the part-time postapply for the post as a part-time employee during the summer holidaysholiday. I hope you will considerI am hoping that you would consider my applicationmy candidacy for the post and give me a chance to discuss it further in a formal interview. I have graduated with a degree in accountingcompleted my graduation in accounting and have strong customer-service and communication skillssound knowledge of customer care. Besides, I have two years of experience as a front-desk receptionistfront desk officer in a telecom company. As I will be free during the summer vacation, I would like to work for your museum shop that sells books, souvenirs, and other museum-related itemsprimarily sells antique items, books, journals and souvenirs. I am quite confident that I would be a able to serve visitors efficiently and courteouslyvaluable asset to your team. I am particularly interested in this position because it would beThe reason for applying for this position is to work in a post that is bothequally challenging and rewarding. At the same time, I will be able to meet people from diverse cultures and regions. This would definitely make my holidays meaningful and exciting. I look forward to meeting you soon. Yours faithfully, Shanthy Devi
Why this response received Band 7.0
The application clearly states its purpose, presents relevant customer-facing experience, and explains genuine interest in the museum-shop role in an appropriately formal tone. The main weakness is that the special skills are asserted rather than demonstrated, and some qualifications and job terms are imprecise. Add concrete examples of customer service, sales, cash handling, or language skills and use more natural application vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All bullet points are addressed and the application purpose is clear, but the experience and special-skills section needs more specific evidence.
Give one concrete example of a relevant responsibility or achievement and identify at least one specific transferable skill.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter progresses logically from application purpose to qualifications, motivation, and closing, though the one-block presentation weakens visual organisation.
Divide the letter into short formal paragraphs that align with the three bullet points.
Lexical Resource
The range is strong enough for the task and the tone is formal, but several collocations are unnatural or imprecise, including sales executive, completed my graduation, and sound knowledge of customer care.
Use standard employment phrases such as sales assistant, graduated in, customer-service skills, and interview.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is used with good control; remaining issues concern article choice, conditional form, and some awkward noun phrases.
Check articles and use direct present or present-perfect forms when describing current qualifications and availability.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You have decided to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- explain what experience and special skills you have
- explain why you are interested in the job
Your response
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