You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: - explain why you have changed your previous job - describe your new job - tell him/her your other news
Sample Response
Dear Jane, Hope you're doing well. It's been so long since I last heard from yousince I've heard from you. I was thinking of you the other day when I saw my neighbour's garden full of tulips. I am sure you are still a keenpassionate gardener. You'll be glad to hearYou would be glad to hear that I have recently taken a job and moved to Ottawa, Canada. As you know, I was looking forward to settlingeagerly looking forward to settling in OttawaOttowa with my family. So when I got a job offer from a prestigious hospitalone of the prestigious hospitals in Ottawa, I accepted it. I liked my previous job in Ontario but had been stuck in the same position for a long timefor a long and was not getting many opportunities to advance my careermany chances to further my career. That's why I changed my job, and so farThat's why I changed my job and so far I find my new responsibilities exciting. I am a general physician at the hospital and I have to look after the visiting patients to diagnose and suggest treatment of illnesses. Sometimes I need to perform minor surgerydo some minor surgery. I must say that Ottawathis place is absolutely amazing and the people are friendly, kind and accommodating. Aside from that, Ottawa is celebrating Tulip Festival annually in May, during the springtime. I know how passionate you are about tulips and gardeningyour passion for tulips and gardening. I bet you would like itwould definitely like it here. So far, I’m enjoying my life here and all the new experiences. I hope you cancould visit us soon. How are things back home in the United Kingdom? I am looking forward to hearingeagerly waiting to hear from you soon. Warm wishes, Eva
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter fully addresses the purpose in a warm, convincing voice, with especially clear explanations of the job change and new responsibilities. Its main limitation is presentation: the entire message forms one long paragraph, while a few awkward collocations and a spelling slip reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to separate the three content areas into purposeful paragraphs and polish unnatural phrases while preserving the natural, friendly tone.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is fully achieved through relevant coverage of the job change, new role, and additional personal news in an appropriate friendly tone.
Make the additional news slightly more distinct from the job update so that each bullet point has an equally clear focus.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from personal contact to the move, the new position, and life in Ottawa, with natural linking throughout.
Divide the letter into clear paragraphs for the reason for changing jobs, the new role, and the closing personal news.
Lexical Resource
A broad, effective vocabulary conveys professional duties and personal impressions, although a few collocations are awkward and Ottawa is misspelled once.
Use more natural combinations such as 'suggest treatments for illnesses' and proofread place names for consistency.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of simple and complex structures is handled with strong control, and the few errors do not impede meaning.
Polish minor structural slips such as 'for a long time' and review tense choice in the sentence about the annual festival.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter:
- explain why you have changed your previous job
- describe your new job
- tell him/her your other news
Your response
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