You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months - say how your work could be done while you are away - ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Sample Response

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Dear Mr Henry,

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I am writing to formally request permissionformally request an opportunity to work at our company’s head office in Germany for six months. I am hoping that you will allow me to workallow me to take the opportunity to work in our head office for six monthsfor about half a year.

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I believe that working at the head office would allow me to gain a deeper understanding of our global operations and learn best practices from senior colleagues. This experience would develop my professional skillsenhance my skills and enable me to apply new insights and strategies within our teambring new insights and strategies back to our team. Additionally, it would give me the chance to build stronger relationships with key stakeholders, which could be beneficial for our department in the long run.

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To ensure that my responsibilities are managed smoothly during my absence, I propose delegating some of my tasks to James, who is already familiar with my ongoing projects. I would also be happy to provideoffer remote support when needed and ensure a thorough handover before I leave.

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I would appreciate your guidance in arranging this temporary placementarranging this transfer and discussing any formal procedures that need to be completed. Please let me know a convenient time to discuss this further.

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Yours sincerely,

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Liam Bennett

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The letter is highly effective: it presents a clear request, develops persuasive professional benefits, offers a practical continuity plan, and seeks the manager's assistance in an appropriately formal tone. Its main limitation is minor repetition in the opening and slightly generic wording in places. The highest priority is to make the request more concise and add one concrete detail about the intended work or transfer process.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The response fully covers every bullet point with relevant, well-developed detail and consistently appropriate professional tone.

Next step

Add a specific example of a head-office project or procedure to make the proposed arrangement even more concrete.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0
Scoring rule

Ideas are organised into purposeful paragraphs and progress naturally from rationale to work coverage and the request for assistance.

Next step

Condense the two similar opening sentences so the letter moves more efficiently into the supporting reasons.

LR

Lexical Resource

8.0
Scoring rule

A wide and precise professional vocabulary is used naturally, including global operations, stakeholders, delegating, and thorough handover.

Next step

Replace generic phrases such as take the opportunity with a more direct expression such as undertake this placement.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0
Scoring rule

Complex and simple structures are varied and consistently accurate, with strong control of conditionals, relative clauses, and modality.

Next step

Maintain this accuracy while tightening repeated clause patterns in the introduction for greater stylistic economy.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:

- explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months

- say how your work could be done while you are away

- ask for his/her help in arranging it

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