A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment?
Sample Response
From the very beginning of the concept of modern societythe modern society concept humanshuman have structured the community in such a way thatwhere the commercial and industrial areas are separated from residential areasareas are separated from the residential area. Even after so many new concepts around residential buildings and modern cities, the basic concept of separating the industrial area from the residential area has remained strong among urban plannersamong the city architects and its adoption has been worldwide. So, I would absolutely oppose the proposal to haverefute the idea of having a large factory near my community as it would have lots of negative effects. To support my opinion I would consider reasons such as pollutionreasons like pollutions and disturbance to the calm ambience of the surrounding areathe entire surrounding.
Factories manufacture and process different types of goods including electronics and chemical goods. While they generate employmentWhile it generates employment and revenue, it also pollutes the environment. A large factory can be responsible for severehigh noise pollution, water pollution and air pollution. Water pollution can contaminate water sourcescontaminate the hydra resulting in health problems forto the people of the society. Air pollution can annoy the residents who look forward to a serene society at the end of a tiring day. It will also adversely affect the children by exposing them to the polluted air emittedpolluted air thrown out by the factory. As a result, children will have to stop playing inat the playgrounds in the society and their mental and physical growth would be hampered. Thus, pollution is the last thing residents would preferthe people of the society would prefer to deal with, in their day-to-day life.
My society is located at a very neat and calm location. Having a large factory near the society would result in disturbance toresult into disturbing the peaceful environment near our locality. The society offers a nice park alongside a small lake which is used by elderly people, exercise enthusiastsused by elderly, exercise enthusiasts and animals daily to freshen up and enjoy the natural bliss. With the advent of a factory in the area could lead to spoiling the ambience of the park and the locality. To add to the sufferings, factories would also increase the traffic in the locality. An increase in traffic means longer commuting timesmore time on commute resulting in more stress for an individual.
To conclude, I would say that large factories do have advantages like more employment and more revenue but it should not impact the residential areas. The factories should be built outside the residential zone thus not disturbing the people living nearby. Thus, I would recommend having the factories out of the city in the factory zone to realise its real unadulterated benefits.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response sustains a clear opposition to the proposed factory and develops its environmental, recreational, and traffic costs in a logical sequence. The discussion is uneven because employment and revenue are merely acknowledged rather than explained as community benefits, while several language errors and inaccurate word choices reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to develop the advantages fairly before weighing them explicitly against the local disadvantages.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and the disadvantages are well developed, but the required advantages receive only brief acknowledgement.
Add a developed paragraph explaining how employment and tax revenue could benefit residents before justifying the final opposition.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organised into focused paragraphs, and the argument progresses clearly from pollution to disruption and the conclusion.
Use the conclusion to compare the developed costs directly with the potential benefits rather than restating the preferred location.
Lexical Resource
There is a good range of topic vocabulary, but inaccurate choices and collocations such as hydra and result into recur.
Choose precise terms for water sources, residential surroundings, commuting, and industrial emissions, and remove inflated phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures, but recurring agreement, article, preposition, and clause-construction errors are noticeable.
Check sentence subjects and dependent-clause structures carefully, especially after while and with introductory phrases.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment?
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