Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
Sample Response
The strength of any nation does not come without costs, one of which is damage to the local environmentone of which is upon the local environment whose resources fuel every sectoreach and every sector of the economy. Nevertheless,And yet many people believe that a strong economy and a clean environment can coexistco-exist. I do not entirely deny this belief; however, I find myself more convinced thatmore convinced of the fact that we cannot have them both.
For years, scientists have developed alternatives toways to replace traditional forms of resource exploitationtraditional sources of exploitation in areas such as electricity generation and fuel productionin many fields, like electricity and fuel. The use of alternative renewable energy from sunlight, wind and geothermal heat, have been applied in many areas, which helps to keep the environment away from harm. In addition, many environmental activists say that it is feasibleit is certainly within our reach to minimize the damage caused by industrial activities and protect Mother Earth. Many have even succeeded in convincing governments to take action in thissuch regard.
Nevertheless, we should not forget that some factors make it impossiblethere are things that make it impossible to reduce our dependencerelieve our dependency on natural resources. For example, the automobile, mining, and steel industries arethe automobile, mining and steel industry, are without doubt taking a heavy toll on the environment through carbon emissions and chemical wasteon account of carbon emissions and chemical waste. However, these industries proveBut those prove to be indispensable to the progressindispensable and irreplaceable to the progress of many economies. Furthermore, tremendous damage has already been done, and many people fear that the environment’s conditionthe environment’s state of cleanliness cannot be restored. Take Beijing as an example. Air quality there is the worst in the world, with thick layers of smog blanketing the citycovering the atmosphere.
In conclusion, my firm conviction is that no matter how hard we try to preserve the environment, while we continue to exploit its natural resources for the sake of the economy, we will never have both of them at the same time.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response presents a clear opinion, discusses both perspectives, and supports its reasoning with relevant examples in a well-controlled structure. Its main weakness is that several claims and expressions are imprecise or overstated, which reduces the force of otherwise strong arguments. The highest priority is to sharpen the explanation of how economic growth can coexist with environmental protection and replace awkward collocations with more natural, exact wording.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed directly, the opinion remains clear, and the main ideas are relevant and substantially developed.
Develop the coexistence argument more precisely by showing how specific policies could sustain both growth and environmental quality.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through purposeful paragraphs, and cohesive devices make the contrast between the two positions easy to follow.
Strengthen internal progression further by making each example's connection to the paragraph claim more explicit.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a wide range of topic vocabulary, though several awkward collocations and imprecise choices reduce naturalness.
Replace phrases such as vague references to exploitation or cleanliness with exact, idiomatic environmental and economic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex sentences are used with generally good control, but agreement and punctuation errors recur in a few prominent clauses.
Check subject-verb agreement and avoid unnecessary commas separating subjects from their verbs.
Write this task while it is fresh
Try the same task now. It helps you remember the feedback and write better next time.
IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.