Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Whether economic growth in a well-off country would increase its citizens’ satisfaction is widely debatedhas become a topic of discussion. I agreeIn my opinion, I agree that while there is a limit to what money can providebring, an increase in a country’s economic prosperitysituation would always increase citizens' satisfactiondelight the people.
First, economic wealth is only a part of life satisfaction, therefore, it can only please people to an extent. From my point of view, there is a limitation of material possessions that a person could hoard. Most people need only a roof over their headsonly need a roof over their head, food and money for other necessitiesfood and money that are used to pay for other necessities. Therefore, once these needs are fulfilled, additional possessionsa surplus of other properties is no longer desirable. Additionally, a person’s satisfaction depends not only on economic wealth but also onis not made of economic wealth alone but also of their well-being and relationships. For exampleTo be more specific, a person could be the richest, yet if he were to suffer from a prolonged illness, he would not achieve true satisfaction.
On the other hand, I believe that however prosperous a country is, additional economic growth would always increase its citizens' satisfactionappease its citizens. There are problems that can be solved only with a nation’s financial resourcesaspects that only a nation’s monetary reserve can solve, thus, the larger the reserve becomes, the more problems it can tackle. Take road infrastructure for example, even if a person drives the most expensive car but the road is bumpy, he would not be able to fully enjoy the experience. In this caseIn these cases, a country’s economic wealth is important since more money can fund better infrastructureequals better infrastructure. Furthermore, an abundance of financial resourcesan abundance of possessions will lead to advancements in technology and healthcare. These advances, in turn,These in turn will benefit its citizens beyond materialmaterialistic satisfaction.
In conclusion, although people require more than wealth to be appeased, I strongly support the view that economic prosperity will result in increased satisfaction of a nation’s citizens.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response is well organized and develops a nuanced argument that additional national wealth can still improve satisfaction through infrastructure, healthcare, and technology. The main weakness is occasional imprecision in both the stated position and vocabulary, including language that equates national reserves with citizens' possessions. The highest-priority improvement is to frame the disagreement consistently and distinguish public economic resources from individual material wealth throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear overall disagreement, examines the limits of material satisfaction, and develops relevant reasons why further wealth may still benefit citizens.
State the degree of disagreement without the contradictory opening phrase and keep every example explicitly tied to additional wealth in an already rich country.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, two well-focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with cohesive devices used effectively.
Refine the transitions within the second body paragraph so the move from infrastructure to technology and healthcare feels more tightly integrated.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of topic vocabulary, though several choices such as appease, properties, and abundance of possessions are imprecise or unnatural.
Choose terms that distinguish personal assets, government revenue, and national prosperity more precisely, and avoid forcing synonyms for satisfaction.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used accurately, with only occasional punctuation and construction issues that do not impede meaning.
Polish comma use around linking expressions and avoid mixed constructions such as even if followed by but.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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