Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems. Suggest possible solutions and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
It is true that issues related to environmental pollutionthe issues related to the environmental pollution have become one of the most seriouscontroversial issues nowadays, and every nation is trying to decide how to tacklewondering about how to tackle the problem. In my opinion, both government and people have to contribute to solvingsolve these problems or at least make themit less dangerous.
On the one handOn one hand, everyone has a major responsibilitybears a great duty to protect our environment. To begin with, parents at home and teachers at school should teach the next generation how to cause less harmabout how to cause less harm to our environment and how to take care of the planetour mother Earth. Through teaching childrenthe children about recycling and reducing waste, both parents and teachers can contribute a lot. Also, people can reduce the gas emissions by using public transporttransports rather than privatepersonal cars and can choose to walk short distances or to their workplaces.
Moreover, by using fewer packages and less plastic and less paperless plastic and papers, they will reduce a major source of environmental damagea massive threat to the environment. On the other hand, governments should make greater effortstake more efforts to reduce pollutionreduce the pollution. Firstly, by making public transport more convenient to encourage more people to use itthem, this will save more money and energy. Secondly, Through media campaignsthrough the media and campaign, many people can learn more about the importance of the environment. For example, in the UK there is a campaign called make Britain tidy and such campaigns encouragesuch campaign encourages people to contribute more to keep the environment clean. Finally, governments should introduce laws to limit deforestationlimit the deforestation in many countries around the world, to ensure that there are enough green forests.
To conclude, there are many ways in which we can address the issue of environmental pollution, and both individuals and governmentsboth individual and government have their own responsibility for this.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear position and offers a well-organised range of relevant actions for both individuals and governments, using appropriately topic-focused vocabulary. The main limitation is that several proposals are listed without fully explaining how they would reduce pollution, while recurring grammar and collocation problems occasionally weaken precision. Prioritise developing each major solution with a concise cause-and-effect explanation, then edit noun forms and environmental collocations for accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear opinion and suggests relevant individual and government solutions. Some solutions are listed rather than fully explained in terms of impact.
For each proposed solution, add one sentence explaining how it would reduce pollution in practice.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is logically organised and paragraphing is mostly effective. A few transitions are imprecise, especially when moving from individual action to government action within the same paragraph.
Keep individual and government solutions in separate paragraphs and use clearer topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary range is good for the topic, with terms such as emissions, recycling, campaign, and deforestation. Some collocations are inaccurate or too general.
Edit environmental collocations, especially public transport, plastic, paper, and take measures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences is used effectively, but article, number, and verb-pattern errors occur throughout.
Check uncountable nouns and plural forms, especially pollution, transport, packaging, paper, government, and individual.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems. Suggest possible solutions and give your own opinion.
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