Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Some feel that scientific research should be conducted by governments instead of private entities. I am largely disagreelargely in disagreement with this sentiment since the public-health risks involvedrisks for public health entailed do not outweigh the capabilitiescompetencies of corporations.
Those in favor of state control over research argue that governments are not motivatedargue governments are not motivated to generate revenue. Companies are inherently concerned with amassing capital and maximizing returns for shareholders and equity partners. An illustrative example of the threat here would be the opioid crisis currently ravaging the United States. Purdue, a privately ownedprivately-owned pharmaceutical manufacturer, produced a pill with knowledge of its extremely addictive properties and intentionally misled the public. The results have been millions of deaths and rising rates of addiction to opioidsrising addiction rates to opioids such as heroin. In contrast, governments are able to prioritize public health since they do not havethe government is able to prioritize public health since they do not have to earn a profit.
However, the example above is an rareextreme exception as most companies are motivated to innovate and contribute to the public good. The examples of this behavior abound, thoughexamples of this behavior abound though they are less likely to receive excessive media attention. Such breakthroughs include medicines such as the vaccine for Covid-19 developed by Pfizer and the technologies that companies such as Apple, Google, and Samsung have pioneered in recent decades. These private companies are able to hire and pay the best employees and are often led by visionary leaders who are driven to excel and overcome competition from other firms. The corporate environment provides the conditionscreates the catalyst for scientists and researchers to develop transformative devices and make discoveries that benefit the general publiccitizenry.
In conclusion, although companies are likely to pursue profits at all costs, they are also more motivated to innovate. The role of government is therefore to contain the worst excesses of the corporate world.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response takes a clear, nuanced position and develops both the public-health risk and private-sector innovation arguments with relevant, specific examples. Its main limitation is occasional overstatement or imprecision, such as the scale claimed for opioid deaths, which slightly weakens the otherwise persuasive reasoning. The highest-priority refinement is to qualify factual claims and make the final comparison between governmental oversight and corporate control even more explicit.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and both sides are explored through well-developed, relevant arguments and specific examples.
Strengthen the final judgement by explicitly distinguishing government regulation from direct government control of research.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through focused paragraphs, and cohesion is handled smoothly with clear referencing and contrast.
Make the transition into the conclusion slightly more explicit by briefly synthesising the relative weight of the two arguments.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide, precise, and flexible, with effective topic-specific language and only occasional imprecise phrasing or overstatement.
Qualify factual claims and replace slightly inflated wording with the most exact term available.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used accurately and naturally, with only rare minor lapses that do not affect communication.
Refine pronoun agreement and reference, particularly when referring to singular collective nouns such as government.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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