Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students should be encouraged to make comments or even criticism of their teachers. Others think it will lead to a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
In almost every educational system, finding strategies to improveincrease educational quality is a major priority. High school students are encouraged to express their feedback on teachersthoughts about teachers in some cultures, while others believe that this might lead to a lack of respect and discipline in the classroom. Both points of view will be carefully examined throughout this essay before a sensible verdict is reached. On the one hand, it is true that student input can help improveaid in the enhancement of educational quality. In many circumstances, the level of comprehension of pupils is highly dependent on the way teachers conduct the classthe manner teachers perform the class, rather than the content of the lesson. If the class is slow, for example, it will be ineffective for professors to teach too quickly, causing the majority of students to forget what they have learned. Without student feedback, it would be difficult to determine whether the lesson pace is appropriate for the studentsadequate for the class, which could compromise the session’s quality. Allowing students to offer comments and criticismsubmit comments and criticisms about their teachers, however, has significant disadvantages. For starters, teachers may be sensitive toare susceptible to students’ unfavorable remarks. Many would believe that praise, rather than criticism or any other type of feedback, is due for their efforts in presenting the lesson. This is a popular belief among teachers in many educational systems in many Asian countriesAsian countries’ educational systems. Furthermore, if too many comments are raiseddue to a large number of comments, the classroom may become chaotic. Students’ opinions differ, and it would be impractical for teachers to devise a teaching method that would satisfy all of them. In conclusion, encouraging high school students to make comments about their professors, despite being appealing in theory, does not appear to me to imply an enhancement in educational quality.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response develops both perspectives with a relevant explanation of how feedback can improve lesson pacing, and its reasoning is generally easy to follow. Its main limitation is that the case about lost respect is less convincingly developed and the essay lacks visible paragraph divisions; prioritise a clearly stated position from the introduction and organise each viewpoint into a distinct, fully supported paragraph.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and the conclusion gives a clear opinion, though the argument about diminished respect relies on limited and partly unconvincing support.
State the opinion in the introduction and develop the discipline argument with a more concrete explanation or example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses logically through the two views, but the absence of paragraph divisions and some mechanical linking weaken the organisation.
Separate the introduction, each viewpoint, and the conclusion into clear paragraphs with one central idea in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably varied academic vocabulary, although several awkward collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace expressions such as performing the class and praise is due with natural, context-specific collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is used with generally accurate control and only occasional non-impeding errors.
Refine clause structures and preposition choices in the few awkward sentences to make them fully natural and precise.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students should be encouraged to make comments or even criticism of their teachers. Others think it will lead to a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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