Some people prefer to eat at restaurants while others prefer to prepare and eat at home. Which one do you prefer?
Sample Response
Many people go to restaurantsthe restaurants for a meal whereas othersthe others cook and eat meals at home. In my opinion, I opt to cook and eat meals at home because I would argue that it is healthier than to eat at restaurants. Firstly, many restaurants do not purchase fresh foods since they want to reducewould like to decrease the cost of meals. They do not pay sufficient attention toattend to the cleanliness and hygiene of the foodcleanliness and hygiene of foods. Hence, some people suffer food poisoning after eating in restaurantsget poisoned by eating in restaurants. It is particularly dangerous for children because they are more vulnerable and can easily become ill because ofcan be easily ill from the poor quality of foods. As it is known, many people eat using the same dishes and drink from the same cups and bottles which are not even properly cleaned. If these things are not cleaned properly, they can be extremely harmful to human healthdangerous for human health. Secondly, preparing and eating food at hometo prepare and eat foods at home can be more economicaleconomic especially for a family. Because to eat at a restaurant frequently would cost a large amount and that would be pretty tough for low wage earners. The good restaurants that maintain the quality and hygiene of foods cost so much thatcost a lot that average people cannot afford themwon’t be able to accommodate. On the other hand, restaurants can offer some advantages. For instance, if you eat at a restaurant, you can save timesave your time. Because to prepare and eat at home one needs to spend a considerable amount of time and effort which could have been used in other constructive works. In addition, some restaurants offer delicious and varied mealsdelicious and variety of meals including international dishesforeign menus that we could not make at home on our own. You can eat awesome meals there and drink winewines in a fascinating atmosphere. Moreover, to prepare and eat at home is a tough task for single and busy people who have very littleless spare time. So restaurants can be a better alternative for those people. In conclusion, it is considered by many that health is more important than money and delicious meals. I believe that if we prepare meals at home, we can prepare foods and dishes properly and we can use healthy ingredients. However, if you eat at a restaurant, you can not be sure that the meals and dishes are clean and healthy.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear preference for home-cooked meals and supports it with several relevant comparisons involving health, cost, time, and convenience. Its impact is reduced by the absence of paragraphing and by frequent awkward collocations and sentence fragments, so the highest-priority improvement is to organise the argument into focused paragraphs and edit each sentence for natural noun, article, and comparative forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear preference is sustained and supported with relevant reasons, although some claims about restaurant hygiene are overgeneralised.
Qualify broad claims and develop the health comparison with a more credible, specific example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognisable sequence, but the single-block presentation and mechanical linking weaken cohesion.
Divide the response into an introduction, focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion, avoiding isolated "Because" fragments.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic, but frequent collocation and word-form problems reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace phrases such as "more economic", "save your time", and "very less spare time" with standard alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, despite recurring errors with articles, plurals, clauses, and comparisons.
Prioritise complete sentences and accurate countable-noun forms, especially "food", "a variety of meals", and "less spare time".
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people prefer to eat at restaurants while others prefer to prepare and eat at home. Which one do you prefer?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.