Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?
Sample Response
Some today would argue that the revolution in information technology generally has a pernicious impacthas a pernicious impact generally. In my opinion, the drawbacks related to social interaction do not outweigh the positive possibilities now available to the average person.
The legitimately worrying disadvantages ofto information technology concern interpersonal relationships. In the past, face-to-face social interactionssocial interactions in person were more common. Today, a majority of conversations take place through messaging apps and on social media. The short-term result is that communication skills are in decline. The longer-term implications will create wider social trends. As people interact and form groups online, theygroups online they are more prone to groupthink and radicalization. What would normally be mitigated by one’s circle of friends and families canfamilies, can now grow unabated in the virtual sphere with possible negative results for all of society.
The main advantages of the current age lie in the expansion of what is possibleare increases in what is possible. These possibilities are primarily conveniencesmost basically conveniences. Users can save time by using their phonestaking advantage of their phones to send emails, make calls, organize their day and undertake a variety of other tasks. As technology evolves, it has even become more common for employees to work remotely and therefore save the time and energy spent commuting to and from the officeconserve time and energy commuting to and from the office. Beyond these simple comforts, people are able to accomplish more with digital devices. This includes the ability to write with word processors, edit video on various applications, and then post content and interact with a global audiencepost and interact with a global audience through the internet and sites such as YouTube.
In conclusion, despite the threat of a less socially active world, there are substantialjustifying benefits concerning human potentialpotentiality. Both the positives and negatives must be weighed and managed carefully.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents a clear comparison and sustains its position with logically developed discussion of social risks, everyday convenience, remote work, and creative reach. Its main limitation is occasional abstract or awkward phrasing that weakens precision, especially in the conclusion; the highest-priority improvement is to express the final judgement more directly and explicitly explain why the benefits outweigh the identified social costs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly answers the question, maintains a clear position, and develops relevant arguments on both sides.
Make the final comparative judgement more explicit by stating exactly why the gains in convenience and capability outweigh the social risks.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a focused introduction, two well-organised body paragraphs, and a concise conclusion, with cohesive links used naturally.
Clarify the reference in the sentence beginning with what would normally be mitigated so the connection between online groups and radicalisation is immediately clear.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide-ranging and generally precise, with effective choices for discussing social interaction, technology, and wider consequences.
Replace abstract or awkward combinations such as justifying benefits and human potentiality with more natural, specific wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad range of sentence structures is used accurately, and the few lapses do not impede communication.
Review punctuation around subordinate and relative clauses to remove unnecessary commas and sharpen complex sentence boundaries.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?
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