Some think that students must travel to another country in order to learn its language and customs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Many believe that in order to become immersed in another language and culture it is important to travel to the country in question. I agree generally, though there are certain exceptions depending on the purpose offor learning.
Those with an academic interest in a given culture often do not need to travel there. This is particularly true if they are researching an historic period. For example, a scholar learning about Ancient Greece going there today, will only see ruins and a radically different culture. Ancient Greek is no longer even spoken. It would be much more profitable for a student of the Ancients to learn the language fluently on their own and become steeped in its historytheir histories and classicalclassic literature. The works of Euripides, Sophocles and Herodotus will provide far greater insight into the history, culture, and language of the Ancient Greeks than the few vestiges from thousands of years ago still standing today.
Nonetheless, cases such as thiscases like the one detailed above are rare and most people will benefit greatly from a more immersive experience. The difference between those studying abroad and learning in their own country is illustrative. Students attempting to learn English, for example, will need to be naturally adept at languages to become fluent without living in an English-speaking country. The majority of learners will improve faster when conductingmaking daily transactions in English and using English in everyday situations outside the classroomlearning in the real world outside the classroom. The cultural advantages are also self-evident. English movies and TV shows vary in realismare realistic to varying degrees but pale in comparison to having friends from other countriesactual foreign friends and experiencing their traditions and culture firsthandexperiencing firsthand their traditions and culture.
In conclusion, apart from esoteric academic study, nothing can replace the experience of living in another country. Anyone fully committed to understanding the culture and language of another country must factor in a period living therea period of time in residence there.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The essay offers a nuanced and consistently maintained position, supported by a distinctive historical exception and a convincing explanation of the linguistic and cultural benefits of immersion. Its main limitation is that the Ancient Greece example receives disproportionate space and includes a slightly awkward sentence; the highest-priority improvement is to streamline that exception and devote more precise support to contemporary learners.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear qualified agreement is sustained throughout, with both the exception and the general case developed through relevant support.
Strengthen the contemporary case with a more specific illustration of how residence improves language use and cultural understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is purposeful, progression is clear, and the concession leads naturally into the dominant argument and conclusion.
Balance the two body paragraphs more tightly by condensing the historical example and expanding the main case proportionately.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an extensive and precise vocabulary naturally, including language suited to academic, historical, and immersive contexts.
Maintain this precision while avoiding slightly overstated or broad expressions such as self-evident when explanation would be stronger.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide variety of complex structures is used with strong control and only rare lapses in construction or punctuation.
Revise the awkward modifier and comma placement in the sentence beginning with the scholar learning about Ancient Greece.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some think that students must travel to another country in order to learn its language and customs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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