In the future, it will become more difficult to live on Earth, so more money should be spent researching how to live on other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Initially, it is totally true that we are living in an age which starving with leading issues. Primarily after this pandemic situation, people are totally distracted with their life. Many of them lost their lives, a few of them lost their savings, and others lost their employment. OverallIn totality, people are facing a diredrastic situation that they had not faced before in their liveswas not faced earlier in their life. Researchers may invent remedies in the form of vaccination till an absolute adequate solution is not available. Apart from this, inflation, economic crises, and other natural disastersinflation, economic crisis other natural disasters are also seriousrigorous problems for individuals. Last but not least, our natural resources are limited, and there iswas no immediate alternative for the same.
On the other hand, spending money on research into life on another planetspending money for research studies for another planet is a Himalayan task. Only wealthy investorsOnly humongous investors or materialists can affordcan only afford its cost. Still, scientists remain uncertainwere on the track of confusion that is humans are able to live in outer space. To surviveFor surviving on other planets, we require suitable facilitieswe required advantageous facilities that function reliablywhich are error-free. In addition, we require substantial investmentwe required a mammoth investment for infrastructure, transportautomotive, and health care. Still, there is no guarantee that humans can survivethere is no security for humans can survive on other planets.
In my opinion, humans should find a practical solution to address these problemsovercome these situations. Government officials should take the initiativetake initiation for human welfare.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response offers a recognizable line of discussion, especially when identifying the expense and uncertainty of living on other planets. However, it is under length, devotes substantial space to loosely relevant current problems, and never states a clear degree of agreement; the highest priority is to give an explicit position and develop two directly relevant reasons about whether space-living research deserves more funding.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response mentions difficulties on Earth and objections to planetary research, but it does not clearly answer the extent question and remains underdeveloped and under length.
State a clear degree of agreement in the introduction and support it with two fully developed, directly relevant reasons.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing provides a basic sequence, but progression is weak because the opening discussion is diffuse and the contrast signalled by the second paragraph is not clearly established.
Give each body paragraph one explicit controlling idea and link it directly to the funding question.
Lexical Resource
There is some topic-related range, but frequent inaccurate or unnatural word choices make several statements strained and occasionally difficult to interpret.
Use familiar precise vocabulary and learn natural collocations for social problems, research costs, and human survival.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors in clause construction, tense, agreement, articles, and prepositions reduce control.
Build accurate complete clauses first, then combine them with controlled subordinating and coordinating structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In the future, it will become more difficult to live on Earth, so more money should be spent researching how to live on other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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