Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Marriage is one of the most important events in a person's lifeceremonies in human’s life. Many people marry for love while many others marry for money. There are valid arguments for both types of marriagewedding. In this essay, I will discuss both views but in my opinion, people should not consider money as a vital component of the marriage. People who oppose marryingwedding for love say that marriages cannot be successful if the couple has a scarcity of money. Money takes the priority and love may fadethe love flies in the air if people cannot live a comfortable life. Opponents of this view also argue that love is just an emotion and can be developed even after marriage. Having a splendid vacation, enjoying luxurious holidays together are memorable and people fallfell in love with each other. In the old daysIn old days parents used to choose the life partner for their kids considering their intellect and various factors where money was one of the major deciding factors and even that time marriages were successful. We seldom hear cases of divorce. Proponents of love marriages comment that even in difficult situations of the life if spouses understand each other they can mutually work in the adverse conditionscondition and resolve the issues. Secondly, the financial condition of people may vary in different stages of life. These marriages will not get affected by the change in economic condition. Finally, love marriages are highly successful as couples do understand each other and they know their compatibility very well before marriage. To conclude, marrying for money or lovegetting wed for money or like is an individual decision and may be governed by culture and tradition as well. In my opinion, for successful and happy married life affection is an important factor and people should marry for the love, not money.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay addresses both perspectives and states a clear preference for love, supporting its position with relevant points about financial change and compatibility. Its effectiveness is reduced by limited paragraphing, underdeveloped evaluation of the financial-security argument, and several awkward language choices. Organise the response into distinct stages and explain more precisely why money matters without making it the basis of marriage.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay discusses both marrying for money and marrying for love, and gives a clear opinion. Some reasoning is underdeveloped and the money side could be evaluated more critically.
Explain why financial security matters but should not be the main basis of marriage.
Coherence and Cohesion
The line of argument is clear, but the essay is mostly one long paragraph and transitions are limited.
Use separate paragraphs for introduction, money argument, love argument, and conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is mostly appropriate, with some effective phrases, but there are awkward collocations and a few wrong word choices.
Use relationship vocabulary accurately: financial security, compatibility, affection, arranged marriage, marital stability.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is generally understandable with some complex forms, but article use, prepositions, and verb forms need attention.
Check countable nouns and prepositional phrases, especially wedding/marriage and condition/conditions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.
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