Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Humans initially lived in cavesWe started living in a cave, as history suggests, and thanks to the development of modern technologynovelty and advancement of modern technology, we now live in well-equipped homesa grand apartment with many amenitiesfacilities which were unimaginable even a century ago. From an uncertain life where our ancestors had to deal with constant fears of darkness and lurking predators, we have a remarkably comfortable and advanced lifestyle and this has all been possible due to technological advancements.
It is often arguedoften argued by many that modern technology has made our lives more comfortablegiven us comfort but has cost us dearly. For exampleAs an example, they point out that we have become less active and more dependent on machines, especially on household appliances. According to them, this is a backward step and appliancesapparatuses cannot improve our lifestyle. What they fail to realise is that advances in sciencethe blessing of science has eradicated many deadly diseases that once wiped out entire citieshad often wiped out cities and made us extremely vulnerablevulnerable like ants in the water. Advancement in technology is not a one-dimensional straight line, it is a spark of light, and without it, we would still be at the mercy of natural calamities. People may blame science for the contamination of food or the advent of fast food, but it is worth mentioning that without science, we would have a global war over food shortagesa world war for the food crisis.
The household appliances such ashousehold appliances like washing machines and vacuum cleaners have reduced the manual labour involved in cleaningmanual labour of cleaning while rice cookers, microwave ovens, coffee makers and electric kettles have improved the way we cook at home. We no longer need to end our day when the sun sets as electric bulbs illuminate the world. Thus, it is easy to criticise the innovations and benefitsinnovation and wonder science has brought into our livesbrought to our life but living without these technologiesbut living without them is utterly impossible. For instance, imagine what the world would be without electricity, refrigerators, TVs and the internet - unimaginable even for a day.
To conclude, it is undeniable that modern household appliances have made it easier and faster to perform our tasks accuratelymade our tasks easier, faster and more accurate. As a resultWith this, we have a better lifestyle and more time to spend with our family members or to enjoy our leisure activities.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear agreement position and uses vivid examples to show how technology and household appliances can make life safer and more convenient. Its main limitation is that much of the discussion shifts from home appliances to science and technology in general, and several exaggerated or imprecise expressions weaken the argument. The highest-priority improvement is to build each paragraph around a specific household benefit and support it with measured, directly relevant explanation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and relevant benefits are presented, but substantial development broadens beyond household appliances.
Keep the supporting arguments centred on modern home appliances and explain their lifestyle effects in greater depth.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically paragraphed and generally easy to follow, though one body paragraph ranges across loosely connected claims.
Give each paragraph one controlling idea and remove tangential examples that interrupt its progression.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a good range of less common vocabulary, but several collocations and metaphors are imprecise or overstated.
Prefer precise, natural expressions over dramatic phrases such as comparisons involving sparks, ants, or world war.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex sentences is used with generally good control, despite some comma splices and article or phrasing errors.
Check clause boundaries and article use, especially in long sentences containing several linked claims.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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