Modern communication is having a negative effect on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Technology has changedhas been changed each and every aspect of our lifestyleLifestyle. Technological advancement has modernized every fieldleads to modernization in every field. Modern communication is one of them. Some people think that there are negative consequences of modern communication on social relationships. I partially agree with this statement.
Some people think that in the past most people lived in close-knit familieswere living in a close-knit family and they did not have any technological deviceshad not any technical gadgets in order to communicate with each other, so they metSo they meet face-to-face and this ledit leads to a positive impact on their relationshipsrelationship. In additionOther than that, nowadays, many online communication platformssites are available such as Instagram, Facebook, and many others, throughin which any person can communicate with an unknown personwith each other unknown person, so the chances of fraud are also increasing and this can harm social relationshipsdue to this social relationships can be affected. Moreover, there is a considerable differencethere is lots of difference between virtual interactionvirtuality and reality so anyone can understand a person's behaviour through face-to-face interactionknow the behavior of any person through face-to-face rather than through online modern communication. Hence, manymyriad people oppose modern communication.
On the other handside, there are also some positive effects of modern communicationimpacts on modern communication. Firstly, due to advances in technologydue to ever-increasing advanced technology many online social networking sites are available in which any person can make friends all over the world, and also they can learn about different cultures while communicating with each other. For example, Facebook is an effective communication siteone of the effective communication site, where different people can share their cultures and also make a social relationship with each other. Moreover, through modern communication, any person can expressstand their views in front of the public and also gain knowledge after making good relationships with people.
In conclusion, as every coin has two sides, there are some negative consequences of relationships through modern communication and also some brighter side of it. Hence, I partially agree with this statement that online communication leads to only negative consequences on relationships.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response has a clear four-paragraph structure and considers both negative and positive effects while maintaining a generally understandable partial-agreement position. Its main limitation is that several ideas are repetitive or only loosely explained, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop fewer arguments with specific causal explanation and then edit sentences for accurate verb forms, articles, agreement, and natural word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the question, presents a partial-agreement position, and offers relevant ideas on both negative and positive effects, though development is sometimes general or repetitive.
Develop each main claim through a specific cause-and-effect explanation or concrete example, and state the qualified position more precisely in the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay progresses through a conventional introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs, and a conclusion, but linking is mechanical and some long sentences contain loosely connected clauses.
Use clearer topic sentences and divide overloaded sentences so that each supporting point follows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary to discuss technology and relationships, but inaccurate collocations and awkward choices such as “stand their views” and “virtuality” occur repeatedly.
Prefer precise, natural combinations such as “express their views” and “online interaction,” and avoid inserting uncommon words unless their meaning and usage are secure.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures, but frequent errors with verb forms, articles, agreement, pronouns, and sentence construction weaken accuracy while meaning remains mostly clear.
Prioritize accurate clause construction by checking every sentence for a clear subject and verb, correct tense, agreement, and necessary articles.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Modern communication is having a negative effect on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?
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