In the future, there will be more older people than younger people in most countries. Is this a positive or negative development?
Sample Response
Nowadays, people read on social media thatyou read on social media some regionssome parts of countries have more older people than younger people. This essay will discuss the positive or negative effects of this demographic shiftthese situations on society.
Some countriescounties have very large populationsextreme populations, which causes them to facedue to which countries are facing povertypoverty issues. People are suffering from malnutrition due to insufficient food and waterfood & water. In this case, the younger generationthe major young generation, especially childrenlike kids, are affected because they dodid not receive adequate nutritionproper intake of nutrition compared with older peopleas compared to older people. Few countries have introduced rulesapplied the rules limiting families to one childto have only one child, due to which their population will fall, which will likely result in less poverty and less competitionpoverty & less competition for resourcesfor the resource.
This can impact society in a number of ways. Older people are not always capable of doing all the work by themselves. Because of their ageAccording to age, they face limitations while doing some activities. They require assistance or personal care due to medical conditions from the younger generation.
For a country's financial and technological growthFor country finance and technology growth, the younger generation is equally important. Compared to younger people, it is difficult for older people to adapt to new technology or learn new things. Many countries around the world are becoming richer as they develop, and at the same time, there is a reduction in family size. A possible negative impact is that there will be fewer younger people in the workplace in the futurein future, thus making the sustainability of future economic growth less certain.
In conclusion, regardless of any impacts, some counties are still continuing to have a trend have limitations on new populations.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies several relevant pressures associated with an ageing population, particularly care needs, technological adaptation, and a smaller workforce, and its paragraph structure gives the discussion a visible shape. The main limitation is that it never states a clear positive or negative judgement, while the poverty and one-child-policy material is only loosely relevant. The priority is to establish a definite position and develop two directly connected consequences around it.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Some relevant negative effects are presented, but the required judgement remains unclear and a substantial part of the discussion is tangential.
State clearly that the development is positive or negative, then support that judgement with two fully explained consequences of population ageing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is evident and some ideas progress logically, but the opening body paragraph and conclusion do not connect coherently to the central question.
Give each body paragraph one ageing-related consequence and make the conclusion restate the position reached through those arguments.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary to discuss demographics, care, technology, and economic growth, though frequent inaccurate wording limits precision.
Replace vague or faulty phrases such as extreme populations and country finance with accurate demographic and economic terminology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence forms, but recurring errors in agreement, articles, comparison, and clause construction sometimes strain meaning.
Build accurate main clauses first, then add subordinate information while checking subject-verb agreement and comparative structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In the future, there will be more older people than younger people in most countries. Is this a positive or negative development?
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