With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?
Sample Response
The developments of technology and online communications have made it easier than ever to connect with people from all over the world. Some argue that due to this development, individuals will never experience loneliness and will always have opportunitieswill constantly have the opportunity to form new friendships. I personally disagree with this opinion.
While it is true that online communication has made it easier to connect with people, the quality of these connections also mattersit is important to consider the quality of these connections. Online communication is often impersonal and lacks the depth and intimacy of face-to-face interactions. It is also easier to misinterpret tone and intention when communicating online, which can lead to misunderstandings and conflicts. This is why someone who has more than 500 online friends might not have someone at her side when she needs that someone to take care of her when she is ill.
Moreover, the constant access to online communicationconstant availability of online communication can Deleteactually make people feel more isolated and disconnected. Spending too much time online can lead to a lack of social skills and a reduceddecreased ability to form meaningful connections in person. In some cases, online communication can even become a substitute for real-world relationships, potentially harming mental health and well-beingwhich can be detrimental to mental health and well-being. So the way I see friendship is not something that we can have just from having online communication. Online contacts can help us stay connected but cannot create trusted friendshipsnever make us trusted friends.
In conclusion, while online communication has made it easier to connect with people, it is important to consider the limitations and drawbacks of these connections. Face-to-face interactions are still essential for building strong relationships and forming meaningful connections. Therefore, I do not agree with the opinion that people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends with the development of online communication.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response maintains a clear disagreement and supports it with coherent explanations of why online contact may lack depth or increase isolation. Its main limitation is some repetition and several awkward formulations that weaken an otherwise convincing argument. The highest-priority improvement is to express the distinction between online contacts and genuine friendship more precisely, using varied vocabulary and cleaner sentence structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout, and the response develops relevant reasons and examples that directly address the claim.
Develop the second part of the prompt about making new friends a little more explicitly rather than treating it mainly through loneliness.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is logically organised, with clear paragraph purposes and smooth progression from concession to critique.
Reduce repeated restatement of the limitations of online communication in the final body paragraph and conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, though repetition of 'connect' and several unnatural collocations reduce flexibility.
Use more natural alternatives for phrases such as 'make us trusted friends' and vary repeated connection-related wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are frequent and mostly accurate, with occasional awkward constructions that do not impede communication.
Reshape cumbersome clauses, especially 'the way I see friendship is not something', into concise and grammatically direct sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?
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