Some people think parents should supervise their children’s activities, while others believe children should be free to do what they want in their free time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Nowadays, children are way smarter than their parents because of the help of technology, so keeping an eye on children’s activities is difficult for the parents, and with this, the development of children impact somehow. So, parents havethe parent has to take care of their children by considering all aspectswith covered all aspects and thereby raise their children wellstill raise a good child. I will explainFurther, I am going to explain both views.
Some thought that keeping an eye on children’s daily routine is good for them and for their parents, but nowadays they are smarter and have all the knowledge and all this knowledge available on the internet, so they learn a lot of new things over there. So, parents must monitor what their children watchtake care of what they are watching on the internet and set a timetable for their internet useset a timetable for them to use it. Parents should know who their children's friends arehave knowledge about their friends and where they are going, which can reduce their worriesso they do not worry about them.
Meanwhile, if some parents choose not toif some parents do not want to monitor their children’s activitieswatch the children’s activities, then they must spend some time with them to get to know them better, and children must alsochildren also must communicate openly with their familiesshare everything with the family to gain their parents' trustto gain the trust of their parents. As a result, parents can allow themWith this, parents allow them to choose their own free-time activitiesto freely do what they want to do without any restrictions. Nowadays, parents do not have much time for their children, but if they want their children to become good people, they must teach a good lesson in life and, with their children’s help, can become free.
In conclusion, both children and parents have to gain each other’sother trust and avoid lying to each other; in this wayand not lie to each other and with this, lives become easy for both.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is organised into clear stages and offers relevant practical ideas about online supervision, trust, and family communication. However, the two views are only partly distinguished and the writer’s own position remains vague, while frequent language errors reduce precision; the highest priority is to state a direct opinion and develop each side through a clear claim, explanation, and example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both supervision and freedom are addressed with relevant ideas, but development is limited and the conclusion does not clearly state which approach the writer supports.
Present an explicit opinion in the introduction and conclusion, then develop each view with a distinct reason and concrete example.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing provides a basic progression through the two views, but repetitive connectors, long chains of ideas, and vague references weaken cohesion.
Use one controlling idea per paragraph and divide long linked sentences so the relationship between each claim and consequence is clear.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers the topic adequately, but repetition and frequent awkward expressions or inaccurate collocations restrict precision.
Expand the language for supervision, independence, and trust, and learn common collocations rather than relying repeatedly on children, parents, and so.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally recoverable, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, possessives, verb forms, and sentence construction show limited grammatical control.
Practise accurate simple and compound sentences first, checking every clause for a clear subject, finite verb, agreement, and possessive form.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think parents should supervise their children’s activities, while others believe children should be free to do what they want in their free time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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