The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Some people believe that parents should be made to undertake parenting courses in order to support their children’s healthy developmentguarantee that their children develop well. Personally, I disagree with this idea and will explain my reasonswill outline the reasons below.
On the one hand, parenting courses could equip parents with the necessary skills and knowledgewith necessary skills and knowledge to help them manage the challenges of raising their childrendeal with raising their children. For example, many first-time parents may feel overwhelmedmany first-time parents can be overwhelmed by the responsibility of caring for their new born infant. Without proper instruction, they do not know how to care for their babyhandle or care for their baby effectivelymost effectively. Parenting courses could help parents to overcome these common problems. Similarly, many parents have a great deal of difficulty managing troublesome teenagerstrouble dealing with troublesome teenagers who are displaying difficult behaviour during adolescencemisbehaving while going through adolescence. Delete(1) Parenting courses could also help parents to better understand and deal with these issues.
However, while parenting courses could provide useful skills and informationa lot of good skills and information to parents, many people would argue that parenting is an innate skill that every parentevery mother and father naturally developscan naturally access once they have a child. Delete(2) For example, many mothers instinctively know how to hold and care for their child as soon as it is born. In addition, many people have their own ideas about what good parenting involves due to their own upbringing and cultural influencesupbringing, and cultural influences. Lastly, many people would consider it unreasonable to force peopleconsider it ridiculous that people should be forced to attend parenting courses as people should be free to make their own decisions. Delete(3)
In conclusion, although parenting courses could provide some beneficial outcomes for both parents and children, I believe that it should be up to the parents to decide whether or not they wish to participate in such courses.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response maintains a clear opposition to compulsory parenting courses and is strongest when acknowledging benefits before presenting reasons for parental choice. Its main limitation is that the case against the claim is only partly developed, since the discussion of innate ability and freedom does not fully establish why compulsory courses are not the best way to support children. Prioritise deeper comparison with alternative forms of parenting support and explain their benefits for child development.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the proposition with a clear position and relevant examples, although the reasons against compulsory courses are less fully developed than the acknowledged benefits.
Develop the disagreement by comparing compulsory courses with a more effective alternative and linking that comparison directly to children's growth.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are logically organised into clear paragraphs, and cohesive devices guide the reader effectively through the concession and rebuttal.
Make the contrast between the benefits and objections more explicit so that each paragraph advances the central disagreement more decisively.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently wide range of topic vocabulary conveys ideas clearly, though repetition and phrases such as naturally access a skill reduce precision.
Replace repeated references to parents and courses with precise alternatives and check collocations for naturalness.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex sentence structures is used with strong control, and the few minor slips do not impede meaning.
Proofread punctuation and agreement carefully to make the otherwise accurate sentence control more consistent.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?
Your response
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