Some people believe that school children should learn some practical skills like car maintenance, opening a bank account or learning about other traditional skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
Sample Response
It is true that children study academic subjectschildren learn educational subjects at school, but not many hands-on skills. I completely disagree that schools should teach practical skills such asteach services like bank account management and car maintenance.
On the one hand, the school curriculumschool curriculum plays a vital role in students’ careerscareer. Firstly, children can devote their full attentioncould give full attention to the subjects that they are studying, and it would greatly improve their knowledgeimprovise their knowledge extensively. Secondly, youngsters’ timetablesthe youngsters’ timetable is already full, and they do not have time to learn everyday skills. For instance, I remember when I was at school most of my time spent on subjects such as English, Mathematics, and Science than other services. Finally, teaching practical abilities at school is a waste of time that could be learned in the future.
On the other hand, teaching useful proficiency at school is not required instead they can utilise it for their syllabus. Managing a bank accountBank account maintenance is very simple and easy to learn later in lifelearn in their future. For example, I was never taught this skill when I was at schoolstudying at school but I could manage quite well when I opened a bank accountby opening an account with the bank. There are numerous specialised shops available for repairing vehicles and car-maintenance lessons are therefore unnecessary for schoolchildrenit should be redundant for school kids. Moreover, teens are not very keen to practise these kinds of skillsexercise this kind of skills at school levellever until later in liferather than trying for their future generation.
In conclusion, I believe that more importance should be given to academic subjectsgiven the educational subjects instead of teaching other everyday skillsassistances. The student career will deter when they try to focus on this kind of practical skills and it should be avoided for the bright future.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position and organizes relevant reasons into distinct paragraphs, so its central argument is easy to follow. However, several points are only loosely explained, and frequent inaccurate word choices and sentence-level errors sometimes make the intended meaning awkward or unclear. The highest priority is to develop each reason with a precise explanation and then revise collocations and sentence structures for natural, accurate expression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is maintained and supported with relevant reasons, though several ideas remain insufficiently developed or logically imprecise.
Explain exactly how each proposed practical lesson would affect pupils and support each claim with a convincing example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear paragraph structure and broadly logical progression, but mechanical sequencing and awkward connections weaken cohesion.
Use linking language more selectively and ensure that each sentence develops the paragraph's central reason directly.
Lexical Resource
There is some range of topic vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision and sometimes strain meaning.
Replace misused terms such as services and assistances with precise topic vocabulary, and check collocations during revision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of sentence forms communicates the main message, but recurring errors in clauses, articles, agreement, and phrasing limit control.
Prioritize accurate clause construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting additional complex sentence patterns.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that school children should learn some practical skills like car maintenance, opening a bank account or learning about other traditional skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
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