Some people claim that too much focus and resources have been spent to protect wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Many people todayMany today would argue that there is undue emphasis on the safeguarding of various species of wild animals and birds. In my opinion, though there are legitimate practical objections, it is positive overalla positive overall given the potential impact of abandoning such efforts.
Opponents of current conservation initiatives argue they are an unnecessary waste of valuable resources. The natural development of ecosystems involves animals going extinct and fighting for survival. Human intervention can therefore be seen as unnatural to a certain degree as animals that adapt will flourish and others will become obsolete. Added to this is the economic burden. The majority of endangered animals are found in developing nationsare in developing nations in Africa, Southeast Asia, and South America. National governments in these countries have many other concernsa variety of other concerns related to healthcare, education, employmentemployment, and so on that take precedence over animal populations.
However, humans should protect animals becauseas their disappearance is irreversible. The issue of responsibility is not, to my mind, a compelling enough argument as blame can be assigned in a number of directions and is too self-righteous to be persuasive. Instead, it can be argued that permanent damage to the Earth will impact future generations. The Earth depends on biodiversity for developing new medicines, maintaining healthy food chains, and showcasingnot only for the development of new medicines and the functioning of a healthy food chain but also in order to showcase its variety of lifevaried expressions of life. As the only known home to life in the universe, it would be short-sighted to eliminate species of animals and damage this reputation.
In conclusion, despite the financial cost, it is essential to protect wild animals that are at risk of extinctionwild animals which may go extinct. Governments must sometimes prioritize the future over short-term considerations.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response gives a clear, nuanced position and develops both the practical objections and the long-term case for conservation through a well-controlled structure and sophisticated language. Its main limitation is occasional imprecision in the reasoning and wording, particularly where responsibility is dismissed abruptly and biodiversity is linked to the Earth’s “reputation.” Prioritise making each supporting claim more explicitly relevant to resource allocation and choosing more exact collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The question is fully addressed through a clear position and relevant consideration of costs and long-term benefits, though one part of the supporting reasoning is insufficiently explained.
Explain more directly why conservation benefits justify the claimed level of spending and focus, especially when public resources are limited.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically sequenced into focused paragraphs, with cohesive devices generally used fluently and clear progression throughout.
Strengthen the internal link between the responsibility point and the subsequent argument about irreversible damage.
Lexical Resource
A wide vocabulary is used fluently for abstract argument, although a few collocations are imprecise or rhetorically strained.
Choose more exact alternatives for phrases such as species becoming obsolete and damage to the Earth’s reputation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentence forms are varied and consistently well controlled, with only rare minor awkwardness that does not affect clarity.
Refine the occasional compressed construction so that every qualification and logical relationship is immediately transparent.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people claim that too much focus and resources have been spent to protect wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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