What are the pros and cons of watching TV for children?
Sample Response
Nowadays most people keep a TVevery person keep TV at home to entertain himself and his family. Children watch TV more and more everyday. Most childrenThe mostly children watch cartoons and other children's programmesother kids stuff. However, there are both advantages and disadvantages of watching TV for children. I'll discuss pros and cons of watching TV for children. Let'sLets begin by looking at some of the prossome of pros of watching TV for children. One of the main benefitsOne of main benefit of watching TV for childrenwatching for children is that they learn new things every day. For example, from my own experience,new things everyday like I'm giving you example about myself when I was a childwhen i was kid, we used to watch Meena cartoons, they were very popular at that time. We learnt the lessonWe learnt lesson that the girls should go to school like boys do. One other advantage of watching TV for children is that they don't get bored of watching TV like mostly children annoys their parents, so the parents tell them to watch TV, then parents feel comfortable. After discussingdiscussed some main benefits of watching TV for children now let'slets consider some drawbacks of watching TV for children. One problemOne of problem is that they become addicted to TVthey got addict to TV like when their parents tell them to do their homework, they don't listen and when a parent switches off the TVwhen parent switch off the TV, then they cry and annoy theirhis parents, so their parents feel unhappyparent feel unhappy. One more disadvantage is that its effect on children's eyesightits effect on children eye sight. Doctors saysays that watching TV is not good for eye sight specially for young children. to sum up there are both positives and negatives of watching TV for children. I would suggest that this is a bad habitthis is bad habit, parents should avoid this. They give some toys, so they can play with them and spend time with them, it's good for children and parents too.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response covers both advantages and disadvantages and supports them with recognisable examples, so its central message remains clear. Its main weakness is pervasive inaccuracy in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and word forms, compounded by repetitive wording and single-block organisation. The highest priority is to build shorter, correctly controlled sentences and organise each main point in a separate paragraph before adding further detail.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both sides and supplies relevant examples, though several points remain simple or loosely explained.
Develop each advantage and disadvantage by explaining a clear consequence rather than moving quickly to another example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The advantages and disadvantages follow a recognisable sequence, but transitions are mechanical and the response lacks effective paragraphing.
Separate the introduction, each side, and the conclusion into focused paragraphs linked by clear reference words.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary communicates the topic but relies heavily on repeated words and includes frequent awkward or inaccurate choices.
Replace repeated phrases about watching TV with precise topic vocabulary and check collocations related to addiction and eyesight.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, pronouns, and sentence boundaries reduce control and sometimes strain readability.
Practise writing and checking shorter clauses for correct subject-verb agreement, articles, tense, and pronoun reference.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
What are the pros and cons of watching TV for children?
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