WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
This is a bar chart of the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods. In 1970, Most of Men were studying part-time but from 1980, studying part-time was decreased and studying full-time was increased and in 1990, it was twice as many students as in 1970.
On the other hand, Women studying full-time were increased and not only full-time, part-time also were increased. in 1990, studying full-time was three times as many students as in 1970.
If compare Men and Women, as you see, in 1970, Men were studying more than women full-time or part-time but it changed from 1980 and then, in 1990, Women were studying part-time more than Men and studying full-time was same number.
It shows you Women has a high education now.
官方考官完整点评
There is a good attempt to describe the overall trends but the content would have been greatly improved if the candidate had included some reference to the figures given on the graph. Without these, the reader is lacking some important information. The answer is quite difficult to follow and there are some punctuation errors that cause confusion. The structures are fairly simple and efforts to produce more complex sentences are not successful.
WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
According to this graph, the number of men and women in further education in Britain shows the following pattern.
In the case of male, the number of male has declined slightly from about 1000 thousands in 1970/71 to about 850 thousands in 1990/91. However, this figure rose back to about 850 thousands in 1990/91 from about 820 thousands in 1980/81. The proportion of full-time education has declined during this period. However, the proportion of part-time education has increased dramatically.
On the other hand, in the case of female, the number of both full-time education and part-time education has increased during this period.
From about 700 thousands in 1970/71, these figures rose to about 820 thousands in 1980/81, to about 1100 thousands in 1990/91.
In terms of full-time education, this figure rose by about 260 to about 900 in 1990/91.
On the other hand, with respect to part-time education, this figure rose dramatically between 1980/81 and 1970/71. However this figure rose slightly between 1980/81 and 1990/91.
官方考官完整点评
The candidate has made a good attempt to describe the graphs looking at global trends and more detailed figures. There is, however, some information missing and the information is inaccurate in minor areas. The answer flows quite smoothly although connectives are overused or inappropriate, and some of the points do not link up well. The grammatical accuracy is quite good and the language used to describe the trends is well-handled. However, there are problems with expression and the appropriate choice of words and whilst there is good structural control, the complexity and variation in the sentences are limited.
WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
The graph shows the percentage of audiences over 4 yrs old of UK follows the radio and television throughout the day during the period October - December 1992.
It has been observed from the graph that less than 10% audiances follows the radio at 6:00 am and the percentage raised to a pick around 30% at 8 AM and decline gradually to around 10% during the period 2:00 to 4:00 PM and again raised a bit to around 12% between 4:00 to 6:00 PM. It has again dropped to below 10% at around 10 PM. The rate again raised to a bit between 10.00 PM to 12.00 PM and then dropped slowly by 4:00 AM.
On the other hand, the rate of television audiances raises 0-10% during the period 6:00 to 8:00 am and remain steady up to 10.00 AM and then gradually goes down by 12.00 Noon. The percentage raised dramatically to around 15% by 2:00 PM which again raised to a pick above 40% between 6.00 - 8.00 PM and then gradually dropped between the period 12:00 PM to 4:00 AM.
官方考官完整点评
The answer has an appropriate introduction which the candidate has attempted to express in their own words. There is good coverage of the data and a brief reference to contrasting trends. The answer can be followed although it is rather repetitive and cohesive devices are overused. In order to gain a higher mark for content, the candidate would be expected to summarise the most important features of the graph in an overview, for example, ‘audiences for radio peak in the morning, and for TV, in the evening’. There is some flexibility and precision in the range of vocabulary used. Sentences are long but do lack complexity. To score more highly there would be fewer errors in tense, verb form and spelling which interfere slightly with the flow of the answer.
WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
The bold graph shows the television audiences throughout the day. It shows that the percentage of audiences is zero percent in early morning but it gradually rises upto ten percent at 8:00 am and maintains the same for the next two hours. There is a slight fall in percentage in next two hours however after that it rises sharp upto twenty percent within the next two hours. After this the graph rises very fast and attains it's peak at 10 pm which is about forty five percent. The the graph gradually falls down and at 2:00 am it is at five percent. The thinner graph shows the percentage of radio audiences. Unlike the television one the peak percentage of the radio audiences is at 8:00 am which is about 30 percent. Then it gradually falls and it corrosponds with the television one at two pm. After that it gradually falls but with a small incrase in percentage at 4:30 to 6:00 pm. The percentage of audiance then gradu. goes down and at four Am it is the lowest which is near 2 percentage. These graphs proves the progressive propularity of television.
官方考官完整点评
The answer deals well with both the individual media trends and the overall comparison of these trends. The opening could be more fully developed with the inclusion of information relating to the groups studied and the period of time during which the study took place. There is a good variety of cohesive devices and the message can be followed quite easily although the expression is sometimes a little clumsy. Structures are complex and vocabulary is varied but there are errors in word forms, tense and voice though these do not impede communication.
WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
Bricks are small shaped figures which are used for building.
First of all digger dig the ground untill the clay level. Next the type of sticky earth that is used for making bricks are on the metal grid which selected special parts of clay and throws them on the roller. Then in the manufacturing process sand + water are filled in. The sand gives the texture for bricks. After that the solid is put ready to go through wire cutter or moulding.
This process makes shapes of the bricks.
When the figures have got their shape, these items can be put in the drying oven, where they stayed for 24-48 hours. The temprature is moderate between 200°C and 980°C in the kiln and high between 870°C and 1300°C.
Finally these hot items go to the cooling chamber and get cold from 48-72 hours.
The last part of the manufacturing proces is packaging and delivery to the consumption.
官方考官完整点评
Although the basic process is accurately described, this script fails to present an overview and some of the key features are not adequately covered. The first sentence may have been an attempt at an overview but it simply causes confusion and detracts from the answer. Despite this, the overall progression is clear and there is effective, though mechanical, use of linkers and sequencers. There are also examples of substitution and referencing, although sentences are not always well linked. The vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task. Spelling is generally accurate but there are inappropriate word choices, omissions and errors in word form. Some attempts at subordination and complex nominalisations are made, but generally the structures are limited and there are frequent errors. Overall this is a good example of a Band 5 performance.
WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
Dear Sir, I am writing a report about brick manufacturing. The following are as follows. Brick manufacturing starts with choosing good quality clay. A large digger similar to a crane digs the clay. The process takes about half a day. after which it is put on metal grid to separate unwanted silt and impurities. The strained clay is then put in a large machine roller where it is mixed with sand and water to be moulded later to form the base of the brick. while it is still soft, wire cutters are used to perfectly cut the bricks, removing the rough edges. The soft, bricks are then put in a drying oven where it stays from 24-48 hours. After the pre-set drying time, the bricks are then put in large kilns where it is baked at moderate heat of about 200-980°C. The bricks are first put in moderate heat to avoid cracking. After about few minutes, the bricks are then fired to a high 870-1,300°C heat. This is the final heating or 'cooking' stage so to speak for the bricks. Just beside the kiln is the cooling chamber which is made up of large steel where the bricks will stay for about 48-72 hours. The bricks are then ready for packaging where the brick workers carefully pack the bricks in large container vans for delivery. The whole process is fairly an easy one because there are no sophisticated machines used. The only thing that bothered me was during the heating process because as the manager told me, I have to stay and observe while the clay is being 'cooked' because some of the clays do tend to crack easily because of the wrong sand and water mixture from the start IF this happened, the process has to be repeated again which can be quite lengthy.
官方考官完整点评
This test taker uses an inappropriate format at times (e.g. the letter-style opening and personal comments) and this limits the band for Task Achievement. The process itself is adequately described, although some irrelevant information is included and there is no clear overview. Information is logically organised and there is a clear progression throughout the response. A range of cohesive devices is used appropriately, although there are occasional errors in referencing and linking, and paragraphing would have helped convey a clearer description of the stages. A wide range of sophisticated lexis is used to convey meaning with precision, but there are also occasional flaws in word choice that lead to some slightly awkward expressions. A wide range of structures is also used fluently with only occasional slight error and the majority of sentences are error-free. In spite of the high level of language proficiency, the flaws in format and organisation limit the rating for this response to Band 7.
WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
Brick Manufacturing
The process by which clay bricks are manufactured for the building industry can be outlined in seven consecutive steps. First the raw material, clay, which lies just below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger. Then the lumps of clay are placed on a metal grid, in order to break up the big chunks of clay into much smaller ones, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion further segregates the bits of clay. Sand and water are added to make a homogenous mixture, which is then either formed in moulds or cut into brick-shaped pieces by means of a wire cutter.
Those fresh bricks are then kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of bricks at a time. The dried bricks are then transferred to a so-called kiln, another type of high temperature oven. First they are kept at a moderate temperature of 200°C - 980°C, then at a high temperature of 870°C - 1300°C. This process is followed by cooling down the finished bricks for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber. Once the bricks have bee cooled down and have become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, for example be it a building site or storage.
官方考官完整点评
This response fully satisfies the requirements of the task. All key features of each stage of the process are appropriately and accurately presented. There is an overview in the first paragraph indicating that there are ‘seven consecutive steps’ however for the highest score, a fuller overview would be needed, to summarise those key stages, for example; extracting the clay, then shaping, drying and delivering the bricks. The message is very easy to read with seamless cohesion. Paragraphing, linking and referencing are all skilfully managed. The language used is very fluent and sophisticated. A wide range of vocabulary and structures are used with full flexibility and accuracy within the scope of this task. Only rare minor errors can be found and these do not detract from communication or the high rating. This item is a good example of a very high-level response.
WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
完整考生作文
I disagree that point about children brought up in families.
because, I show that situation arounds me at our country parents. They want they had everything give to their children. but, their behavior is not good effect to them.
On the other hands, children brought up by wealthy parents, they are strong, that means, they can do prepare to deal with the problems of adult life
In my case, I start work from 20 ages I had social experience and I got a money for myself. however, My age is late to work by children ages and I heard about child doing work by another countries that countries had a culture about childrens
That is they doing work for their pocketmoney. they could their money buy something or entrance to the bank. also, our country children's do this. but, many children's accept the money by their parents. which persons got a pocketmoney over the 20 ages. I think, if children's had a work and they study at money, they perfectly prepared their adult life after they must be parents.
官方考官完整点评
While it is obviously related to the topic, the introduction is confusing and the test taker’s position is difficult to identify. Ideas are limited and although the test taker attempts to support them with examples from experience, they remain unclear. There is no overall progression in the response and the ideas are not coherently linked. Although cohesive devices are used, they assist only minimally in achieving coherence. The range of vocabulary is basic and control is inadequate for the task. Language from the input material is used inappropriately and frequent errors in word choice and collocation cause severe problems for the reader. Similarly, the range of structures is very limited, the density of grammatical and punctuation error is high and these features cause some difficulty for the reader. Attempts to use complex structures, such as subordination, are rare and tend to be very inaccurate.
WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
完整考生作文
I greatly support the idea about Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. I support it, because of the following reason -
Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are raise in a certain psychological values. Such as the value of hardworking, dicipline, they are used to be in the condition where money doesn't come easily. They have to earn it, work for it. Oppose to it, a child who comes from a wealthy family is used to have money all the time. Whenever they wanted something, the money is eacilly gave to them as if everyday are their birthday.
Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are well-trained to face adulthood. They are well-prepared to see the fact that the world is a very tough place. They watched their parent everyday worked very hard just to put food on the table. They have the advantage to see the reality and embrace it, set their mind that they too have work hard for their future, their own dreams, their authentic self. A child that came from a wealthy family doesn't always have this advantage. Thic is because their eyes are blinded by the power of money, that their parent has. They also have a dicadvantage of a family love life. Commonly wealthy parents express love by money. They love their children, so they bought them cars, expensive clothes, toys, but they are never home when their children needs them. The basic necessity of compassion isn't fulfilled in this kind of family. The impact to a child is that they will grow up and think that money is everything, that the source of happiness is money. They don't care about other people, they only care about money. The problem is they don't know how to get it, they've been spoiled all the time, so doesn't have the time to discovered the art of money making, only money spending. On the contrary children from families that do not have large amount of money will grow up with the sense of respect for money, they know how to get it and use it well. They know how to face adult life problems because they've been watching since they were achild. But a wealthy child is always to busy with himself to know that.
官方考官完整点评
The arguments in this response are generally well developed, ideas are appropriate and there is a clear position. (It is a shame that the first paragraph, and beginning of the second are mainly copied from the rubric.) Better use of paragraphing would have allowed a clearer focus to some of the supporting points and prevented the lapse into generalisation towards the end. Nevertheless, there is a generally clear progression with a good arrangement of opposing arguments. Referencing is usually accurate and effective, but better use of linkers would have improved the cohesion. Vocabulary is varied and used with some flexibility. The choice is not always precise but the test taker can evidently incorporate less common/idiomatic phrases into the argument and there is a good range that is generally accurate. The repetition of language from the rubric, while integrated, reveals a lack of ability to paraphrase. Regular errors detract from the use of a range of structures, although they do not detract from overall clarity. This is a generally good response to the task, but the weaknesses in organisation and grammatical control limit the rating to Band 6.5.
WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
完整考生作文
I do agree to the statement that children brought up in poor families are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents.
Children of poor parents are prematurely exposed to the problems of adult life eg. learning to survive on a low family income, and sacrificing luxuries for essential items. These children begin to see the 'realities' of life in their home or social environment. Their parent's own struggles serve as an example to them.
These children are taught necessary skills for survival as an adult from a very early age. Many children eg work in the weekends or holidays to either collect some pocket money or even contribute to their families' income. A good example is the many children who accompany their parents to sell produce at the market. They are making a direct contribution to their families in terms of labor or income.
Children of poor families also are highly motivated. They tend to set high goals to improve their economic situation. A relevant example would be Mr Bill Gates (founder of Microsoft Corporation) He had an impoverished background but he used his talent and motivation to set up the worlds largest computer organisation.
However, there are some problems that children from poor backgrounds do encounter. Many of these children who are 'robbed' of their childhood eg while working, may feel cheated. They often turn to crime. This however, is a small group.
In summing up, children with impoverished backgrounds are able to deal with problems of adult life because of early exposure, family role models and sheer motivation.
官方考官完整点评
The topic is very well addressed and explored in depth. The position is clear throughout and directly answers the question. The ideas presented are relevant and very well supported, apart from some over-generalisation in the penultimate paragraph. However, there is no mention of how well children from ‘wealthy parents’ deal with problems. Although this is not a requirement, it could be added to further improve the response. The ideas and information are very well organised and paragraphing is used appropriately throughout. The answer can be read with ease due to the sophisticated handling of cohesive devices, with only minimal lapses (for example, the use of ‘e.g.’). The writer uses a wide and very natural range of vocabulary with full flexibility. There are many examples of appropriate modification, collocation and precise vocabulary choice. Syntax is equally varied and sophisticated. There are only occasional errors in an otherwise very accurate answer. Overall this is a very strong performance and a good example of Band 8.5.