The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
The charts shows the oil resources held, together with the proportions consumed within the same area each year, in different areas of the world
It is obvious that the region holding the most oil sources is the Middle East, with 56.52%, over a half of total world oil resources. While in the United States and Asia, the level of oil consumed each year is far more away from the oil resources they hold. The percentage of total world oil consumption of United States and Asia are 23.48% and 26.21% respectively. They are the two highest oil consumption region in the world.
Another place that is worth mentioned will be the Western Europe. With about twenty percent of total world oil consumption, the Western Europe merely holds less than 1.5% of the oil resources in the world.
Regions that are not mentioned above have the close percentage between oil holding and consuming. Whereas Canada has the higher level of oil holding than consuming, the respective figures are 14.84% and 2.48%.
Overall, the charts suggest that Middle East is the only majority of oil resources held, While Asia, United States and Western have the highest level of oil resources imported.
官方考官完整点评
This response describes the main points of the bar graphs and provides a summary of their most significant features. However, the figures are not well selected to support or highlight the key features, there are some minor inaccuracies, and details are missing, with only half of the countries on the graphs being mentioned. There is an overall progression to the response, though the middle section could have been structured more clearly and coherently by use of linkers. There are no errors in spelling, but this accuracy is achieved by staying within a limited range of vocabulary, and by relying on repetition of the phrases supplied on the question paper. Grammatical errors occur but are not frequent or serious enough to affect communication, and there is a range of sentence types which includes some complex structures.
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Volume 2 · Academic example 1 · response 2
Academic A类 · Task 2
官方评分4.5分
字数
216
题型
Task 2议论文
完整作文题目
In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people.
What do you think may be the reasons for this?
What problems might this cause in society?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
完整考生作文
It's generally supposed that the younger people should respect and take care of older people. Nowadays, many people think that the older people are the problem of modern society. However, How people should give the important older people in this present time for preventing the problem in society.
In many countries are facing of this problem because many people are responsible everything in their lifes, For example, One person has many roles in society such as parents, boss and teacher etc. This reason make someone who forget older people. Some countries, many older people live alone which the government has not pension and facilities for them. In my country this is the problem because older population are increasing every year. They don't have a house for living, don't have money and children and cousins don't take care of them. The government must be help them by providing many houses which this case invest a lot of money to making this project.
On the other hand, In some countries, The government help and support the older people for instance, European people have pension and good facilities such as, free for seeing doctor don't paying when taking the public transportation. I totally agree with this view that my country provide it for them. It is the good reason
官方考官完整点评
There are two main problems with this response. Firstly, it is too short and does not meet the length requirement for a Task 2 response (a minimum of 250 words). Secondly, most of this response is irrelevant. From the seventh line, it goes off the topic of respect and instead discusses what provisions governments should make for the elderly. Apart from these two major weaknesses, there are some good points about this response. It shows evidence of organisation in terms of an opening paragraph which introduces the topic, and two concluding sentences at the end. Linking devices are quite well used throughout to connect the different ideas (although the response as a whole lacks coherence in relation to the actual question). The vocabulary is the best feature of this writing: in spite of the largely irrelevant argument, there is a sufficient range of words which specifically relate to the topic, and spelling errors are very few. As for grammar, the writer attempts complex structures, but these are faulty, and mistakes occur with even simple present verbs.
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Volume 2 · Academic example 2 · response 3
Academic A类 · Task 1
官方评分7.5分
字数
217
题型
A类小作文
完整作文题目
The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
The diagrams indicate the alterations being made to the school from 2004 to 2024 to accomodate for the predicted increase in student numbers from 600 to 1,000. In 2004, the school only has one car park with a path leading from the main entrance to the sports field. The path seperates the two school buildings which, together with the sports field, are located north. Trees are present north, north-east, east, and west of the school. In comparison the school planned for 2024 has two carparks and three school buildings. The path in the 2024 plan links building three to buildings one and two, which are planned to be joined together by building infrastructure. A road is envisioned to connect carpark two with carpark one. In addition the sports field will be reduced in size and relocated south of its previous location below carpark two. The surrounding trees remain in similar positions only requiring a few trees to be repositioned or replanted around new infrastructure.
These changes to the school buildings, road, path, carparks and sportsfield aim to house the extra 400 students planned to be attending the school in 2024. The only decrease in size of any part of the school from 2004 to 2024 is the sports field in order to accomodate school building number three.
官方考官完整点评
This is a very accurate description of the two diagrams, which covers every aspect of the information shown. There is nothing inaccurate or irrelevant in this response with regard to content. It has a clear introductory sentence, and a summing-up at the end. The middle section of the response is logically arranged by year, though this first paragraph is rather long and could usefully have been split into three. Cohesive devices are few, but flexible, and help the reader when they are used. The range of vocabulary used is quite wide and precise, and includes several low-frequency items used appropriately. Errors in word choice and spelling occur rarely. A wide range of grammatical structures and all punctuation are accurately used throughout, but this criterion is not a 9 as the choice of tense could be more precise and consistent.
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Volume 2 · Academic example 2 · response 4
Academic A类 · Task 2
官方评分7.0分
字数
383
题型
Task 2议论文
完整作文题目
It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
完整考生作文
I MOST DEFINITELY AGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT, AND I AM CONVINCED THAT IF MORE PEOPLE WOULD SHARE THIS AGREEMENT, MANY OF TODAY'S PROBLEMS COULD BE AVOIDED AND, UNDER THE RISK OF SOUNDING CANDID, "THE WORLD WOULD BE A BETTER PLACE".
IF ONE IS AWARE OF THE GENERAL, WESTERN (WELL, GLOBAL REALLY) CIVILIZATIONAL TENDENCY TOWARDS LIVING WITHIN CLOSED GROUPS, ALMOST FROM "BIRTH TO DEATH", ONE MAY FIND THAT ADRESSING THE SUBJECT AT THE EARLIEST MOMENT POSSIBLE IS A REASONABLE POSSIBILITY OF STARTING TO FIGHT THAT TENDENCY. CHILDREN ARE NATURALLY KEPT, IN THE FIRST FEW YEARS OF THEIR LIVES, IN A VERY LIMITED, CONTROLLED ENVIRONMENT, AND THEN GRADUALLY START OPENING UP TO THE WORLD AROUND THEM. SO IT'S VERY IMPORTANT THAT, WHEN THEY START DOING SO, THEY ALSO BEGIN TO UNDERSTAND WHAT SURROUNDS THEM - PEOPLE, RACES, SOCIAL BACKGROUNDS, FAMILY STRUCTURES, RELIGIOUS BELIEFS, ETC. - AS PART OF THE REAL WORLD WHERE THEY WILL LIVE AND BE CALLED TO CHANGE, IMPROVE OR CONDITION.
THE ALTERNATIVE TO THIS WILL BE, AS IT IS ALREADY TODAY, THAT CHILDREN WILL LIVE MORE AND MORE ISOLATED FROM REALITY IN ALL ITS VARIED, AND SOMETIMES CRUEL, FEATURES. I BELIEVE THESE CHILDREN, NOT HAVING HAD A CHANCE TO DIRECTLY COMMUNICATE AND INTERACT WITH OTHER KINDS OF CHILDREN, WILL FEAR AND EVEN REJECT SUCH DIFFERENCES. IGNORANCE AND MISUNDERSTANDING IS (HAS BEEN AND WILL BE) ONE IMPORTANT SOURCE OF CONFLICT, AND SOCIAL CONFLICT IN THE FIRST INSTANCE.
I THINK I CAN SAY I WAS FORTUNATE ENOUGH TO HAVE ATTENDED AN ELEMENTARY SCHOOL WHICH WAS CHARACTERIZED, AMONG OTHER THINGS, FOR JUST SUCH A FEATURE: EVEN THOUGH IT WAS A PRIVATE SCHOOL, WHERE PARENTS WHO COULD AFFORD IT HAD TO PAY A SUBSTANCIAL FEE, IT HAD A POLICY OF TAKING IN CHILDREN WITH ALL KINDS OF DIFFERENCES. I GOT ACCOSTUMED TO HAVING COLEAGUES AND FRIENDS OF LOWER SOCIAL BACKGROUNDS (ECONOMICALLY SPEAKING), WHO WHERE STATE-FINANCED TO ATTEND THE SCHOOL; WITH DIFFERENT LEARNING HABILITIES (DEAF, MENTALLY DISAVANTAGED, ETC.); AND OF DIFFERENT ETHNIC BACKGROUNDS (ASIAN AND FROM PORTUGUESE AFRICAN EX-COLONIES).
I AM VERY CERTAIN THAT THIS PART OF MY EDUCATION HELPED ME BETTER UNDERSTANDING AND ACCEPTING THE WORLD AROUND ME; STILL NOWADAYS I HAVE ALL KINDS OF FRIENDS AND LIKE TO KNOW THINGS ABOUT ALL KINDS OF PEOPLE, AND I KNOW NOT EVERYONE AROUND ME DOES THE SAME.
官方考官完整点评
Although the topic could be more precisely introduced, this response opens with a clear statement of the writer's opinion, and goes on to develop its position clearly and logically, right through to the end. The conclusion would possibly be stronger if it referred back to the actual topic rather than being wholly personal. Paragraphs are used to good effect, and the writing flows well, helped by skilful use of referencing pronouns to link sentences. There is quite a wide range of vocabulary used, with a natural feel for style and collocation, although there are also occasional errors in both word choice and spelling. The grammar consists of a wide range of sentence types used flexibly and accurately; though occasional mistakes occur in verb form and word order, these do not impede communication, and the majority of sentences are error free.
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Volume 2 · Academic example 3 · response 5
Academic A类 · Task 1
官方评分4.0分
字数
144
题型
A类小作文
完整作文题目
The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
完整考生作文
I am going to talk about summarise. Firstly Republic of Korea people workes in underground probable 22% in this job.
Inadition, some of people has a Incineration, I think about 9% they are workes in this job. we can see 66% of the people workes in recycling more than hafe of people they did these job. Secondly sweden the must of people they are workes in the underground, In order to 25% of the people workes in the recycling. Also 20% of Sweden people workes in the Incineration.
Thirdly United kingdom they have more than two jobs. For example, British people likes to worke in the Underground because, the contry has a lots of things to do wit in the Underground. that's more the Dumping at sea in the summey. Also the chemical treatmend and Incinevetion they are needed. as much as any job.
官方考官完整点评
This response illustrates the need to read the question very carefully before beginning to write. Due to a misunderstanding of the three pie charts given, this writer does not describe the actual topic, but discusses types of job instead. This means that all the information stated in this response is inaccurate. However, the response is organised and some connectives are used to link the sentences together – this is the strongest feature of the response. Even so, it is not always easy to follow the overall development. There are many spelling mistakes on even basic words, and the range of vocabulary is very limited. Errors in sentence structure and grammar are frequent and there are few attempts at complex sentences. Although some structures within sentences are accurate, no whole sentence is correct, and this causes some strain for the reader.
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Volume 2 · Academic example 3 · response 6
Academic A类 · Task 2
官方评分3.5分
字数
320
题型
Task 2议论文
完整作文题目
Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
完整考生作文
Nowaday, the technolodge is much developed than before, and people owened a car is quite normal. however, the car gives us more easier life also takes many problems. every year has many people dead in traffic accidents. Some people think that reduce transport accidents the key is strict punishments for driving offences, I think that is the way and can be done.
For me, traffic accident is well-known, as my father had met an accident, and because he drove too fast and too tired. If I told him strict punishments, don't so hurry, this accident might be should n't happen. When people always think that speed can take us excieting, wonderful feeling and forget their family worried about them, their future should be fantastic if they take care, Strict punishment is especially important.
However, On the other hand, many ways can improve road safety, for example, more educate in usual life, more adverting on TV, radio, newspapers, limit speed on the road, stronger fines. I think that the most important is foundation, everything happened, nothing can do more. but before it happen, we can learn a plenty of from others accidents, why we drive so fast, why we forget the friends, family's love and worry. Father have to educate children, because of yours mistake, you may be broken two families or more families's happiness. This responsibility is huge that you can't imagin. So, I think foundation is the most need thing to do.
let Every one need know about that car or other transports we invented is our life to be easier, not bring us sad, many years ago, not so developed society as now, but the world still turned very good, people's life still happy. why when the technolodge become so develop, lots of unhappy things happened, government should think about it, also our people need attention this problem, than our life will be more comfortable and more safety.
官方考官完整点评
This answer is an attempt to address the three parts of the prompt (two opposing views and the writer's own opinion) but there are few relevant ideas. Instead, the writing is somewhat anecdotal and the last paragraph in particular is vague and seems to be dealing with a different topic, namely technology. The writing is laid out in paragraphs, but within each paragraph, ideas are not clearly grouped and seem to be repeated across paragraphs. Despite the use of linking words there is no logical sequencing of ideas, and they are difficult to relate to each other, so the argument is very difficult for the reader to follow. There are some relevant words, but control of spelling is so poor that several words are unintelligible. When we look at the grammar, some structures are correct but overall many sentences are lacking a main verb, so that although the meaning can be followed, this is only managed with difficulty.
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Volume 2 · General Training example 1 · response 7
General Training G类 · Task 1
官方评分7.5分
字数
207
题型
G类书信
完整作文题目
You have heard about plans to build new apartments in a public park near your home. You want to give your opinion about this.
Write a letter to the editor of your local newspaper. In your letter
- explain how you learnt about these plans
- say what you think of the park
- give your opinion on the plans
Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
完整考生作文
Dear Sir or Madam,
It is Mohammad khatib, one of the fans of your newspaper. I am writing this letter to you to let you know of some, I hope, rumors I have heard recently about construction plans in our popular public park.
As you know, this is the only park within our immediate vicinity, and many people go there for refreshment and relaxing. So many children also play in this park with their peers. I have recently heard from some of my neighbors that Royal construction company intends to build some apartment blocks in the park. At first I did not take it serious until yesterday that I saw some engineers measuring and calculating diffrent dimensions of the park.
We all like our local park including its beautiful fountain; its playground and amusing facilities for children. So, I, as the representative of most of the neighbors have collected signatures against this project.
Therefore, we, as local neighbors, disagree with the plan and ask you to please kindly write an article about the disadvantages of this action and express our great disapproval of the plan. We are looking forward to seeing your article as our voice soon.
Thanks from your cooperation in advance.
Yours faithfully,
Mohammad khatib
官方考官完整点评
This letter covers all three parts of the question very well. Its content is relevant and well illustrated, and the writer's purpose is very clear. The tone of the letter is also consistently appropriate throughout: polite and suitable for addressing the editor of a newspaper. It is easy for the reader to follow the message of this letter, because it has a clear structure and the ideas are presented in a logical order. Connecting words, referencing and skilful paragraphing all contribute to the coherence of the letter. Lexical errors occasionally occur in word form, word choice and spelling. However the grammar is highly accurate.
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Volume 2 · General Training example 1 · response 8
General Training G类 · Task 2
官方评分6.0分
字数
313
题型
Task 2议论文
完整作文题目
Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health, more and more people are eating it.
Why are more people eating fast food?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
完整考生作文
Unfortunately as the world goes on improving people more and more are eager to have fast foods. It's now a kind of habit for kids and also adults to spend their leisure time at fast food restaurants. On my opinion one of the major reason of using fast foods in many countries is the shortage of time that people face with. It should be investigated properly to solve this subject.
As a matter of fact nowadays people in all over the world ought to work outdoors more than before. You know that living expenses are so high that spouses should work together in order to gain more. Therefore they have little time to spend on cooking.
Another reason is the great advertisements which being done by TV programs or magazines, tempting every body to use fast food. Now, parents are paying more attention to their children's needs regardless of how much logically they are. They are about to provide their needs even if children are addicted to take fast foods or so.
You know that obesity, high cholestrol, diabete and laziness are some outcomes of fast food, and if it is neglected may lead to serious problems.
I think nutrition experts are expected to offer more warning programs to people about this matter. Government should spend a special budget on giving people some solution about this subjects. For example making animation programs bearing warning messages for the children is one way to make them aware of it's fate. Or cooking programs which learn how to prepare a healthy food in short time seemed to be usefull in solving this problem.
In conclusion, it needs to plan a serious plan and spend more time and budget to find a way on solving the peril of its widespread. I hope every person would be more careful about his or her health especially on nutrition case.
官方考官完整点评
Both parts of the question are addressed in this response, and the content is appropriate for the topic. The writer's position is clear, and there are plenty of relevant ideas which are developed and supported. These are arranged in an organised way, and paragraphing is helpfully used, so that the response as a whole generally progresses coherently to the conclusion. There are errors in word choice and spelling, but the range of vocabulary is quite wide and includes some less common words which specifically relate to the topic. With regard to the grammar, there is a mix of sentence types, but errors occur with plurals, prepositions, word order and punctuation, and with passives and verbs in complex structures.
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Volume 2 · General Training example 2 · response 9
General Training G类 · Task 1
官方评分6.0分
字数
171
题型
G类书信
完整作文题目
You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work.
Write a letter to your employer. In your letter
- explain why you need this time off
- give details of when you want the time off
- say who can do your work when you are away
Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ............,
完整考生作文
Dear Mr. White,
I am writing this letter to explain why I need to take two weeks off and the time about my holidays.
I started work in our company at July 2008. Since then I did not go back to China. I found it out in the next few weeks our department do not has lots work to do, So I think maybe it is a good chance for me to take two weeks off and go back to China enjoy the holidays with my family and friends.
I checked the next avalieable ticket will be at 01 August 2009, So I am thinking take my holiday from 01/08/2009 to 15/08/2009. I talked with Brian Kiby today, he said he will cover my work during the time I will in China, and I will bring my laptop with me, everyday I will check my emails and will resolve any problems Brian can not fix.
Thanks again for your attention, I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours Sincerely
官方考官完整点评
This letter addresses the requirements of the task in that it adequately covers all three of the bullet points, and the writer's purpose is generally clear. The tone of the letter is suitable for writing to an employer, and all of the content is relevant and accurate. The letter is easy to read because of the coherent arrangement of information, the logical sequencing of sentences and the use of connectives within paragraphs. A range of vocabulary is attempted and there are some examples of less common words, but errors are quite frequent in noun phrases and spelling. With regard to grammar, there are frequent errors in verb forms and subject/verb agreement, especially in complex structures, but there is a good mix of sentence types.
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Volume 2 · General Training example 2 · response 10
General Training G类 · Task 2
官方评分5.0分
字数
331
题型
Task 2议论文
完整作文题目
Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
完整考生作文
Zoos. We Need You or Not.
Last month, I went to the Dublin Zoo with my best friend Jack and his families. I can not remember When was the last time I went to the Zoo and see the animals. anyway it is long time ago. that time I was a kid and I was very very happy.
We arrived the zoo around 11:00 AM, Jack's two children they so exciting, Keep running. Keep asking questions Keep taking photos.... but I did not feel happy any more, I saw the "wild animals" were locked in a small cage, they even didn't move at all, you can not believe they lived in the forest before. I felt sorry for them. I talked with Jack about what I felt, he answered, "Pal, I had the same feeling. if you think you give the foods and water to the animals that is enough, no, you wrong, they need freedom, the same as human." Human can fight for their freedom, use their hands, guns, even use their lifes But poor animals they want to do it, but against with their enermy - human. they will never win.
When we left the zoo around 4:00 PM in the afternoon, We saw a group deers crossed the road. I saw them running, I even saw their smelling faces.
On the other hand, zoos still have some advantages. First, the kids love the zoos, they can get knowledges the books and DVDs can not give to them, use there as a class to teach them love our world, love our earth. Second, you can save the animals, some animals they nearly disapper from the earth, like panda, we have to protect them. Let the number grow up again, and later we can let them back to their real home.
Trade the animals as your friend, even if they are in the Zoo, I hope in the future, all the animals will free from the Zoo, enjoy their lifes.
官方考官完整点评
This candidate has chosen to take an unusually personal approach to the topic, so that the basis of the response is an extended narrative of an event. This is not an appropriate format for a task that requires a discursive text. Although the content of the story is relevant, the extent of this personal account detracts from the overall response to the question. Rather than being used just as an illustrative example, the narrative takes over the whole response so that the story of the zoo visit outweighs the general discussion. However, both viewpoints are discussed, albeit too indirectly, and the writer's own opinion comes through clearly. There is some organisation to the response. However, the content is not always arranged coherently, and the paragraphing is not always adequate. The vocabulary used is fairly simple, and there are errors of spelling, word form and word choice. However, the vocabulary resource is just sufficient to achieve