Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.
Sample Response
The diagram outlines the development that the village of Chorleywoodthe Chorleywood village of London witnessed between 1868 and 1994. Overall, developmentdevelopment works in this village were done in different periods and much of this construction wasmuch of these constructions were done between 1970 and 1994. Interestingly, transportation facility defined the areaare of development in this village. According to the diagram, the motorway was built in 1970motor road was established in 1970 while the railway was built in 1909 in Chorleywood. Before 1900, only a portion of the village was developed and between 1883 and 1922later (between 1883 and 1922) the station was built and new areas developed around the station and railwaysome development works were finished. The area near the station was then improved and during the end of this construction, in 1970 to be precise, the motorway was completed. After 1970, the expansion process seemed accelerated and many areas of the village came under the developmentrenovation process. At the beginning of 20th century, the railway was built. The land roads including the motorway, roads and railroads of this village connect almost all of the parts of the villagecity and formed a hash-like shapeforms and hash like shape. The progress in this area had been done mostly based on the establishment of the transportation systems but the park and the golf course were placed in the middle of the village.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s clearest strength is its broad overview that links Chorleywood’s expansion to transport development and recognises that most growth occurred after 1970. Its main weakness is imprecise, sometimes inaccurate sequencing and location detail, compounded by repeated railway information and awkward map vocabulary; the priority is to organise the report chronologically and describe each shaded area precisely in relation to the station, roads, railway, motorway, park, and golf course.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response describes the main development periods and links growth to transport routes, which is central to the map. However, it includes some inaccurate or unclear sequencing, repeats information about the railway, and does not precisely describe where the oldest and newest areas are located.
Describe each shaded development period by location relative to the station, railway, main road, motorway, and park, avoiding vague claims such as “renovation”.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a basic progression from overview to details, but the order is not fully controlled and several ideas are repeated.
Use one paragraph for early development around the station and one for the post-1970 expansion along the motorway.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sometimes effective, but several word choices are inaccurate for a map, including “renovation”, “city”, and “land roads”.
Use map-report terms such as “area”, “development”, “expanded”, “clustered”, “alongside”, and “to the east/west”.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent grammar and word-form errors reduce precision, though the overall meaning is usually recoverable.
Revise articles, prepositions, and noun forms, especially in phrases describing locations and transport links.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.
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