The Diagrams below show changes in a cinema from 1980 until now,
Sample Response
The two diagramsyielded two pictures illustrateillustrates the changes in a cinema between 1980 and the presentfrom 1980 and nowadays.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that after advancement cinema screen rise and more shops build.
In 1980, in the north, left to the right side used as car parking and the entrance was on the south centre direction. Cinema 2Two cinema 2 was belowwas on below car parking, and Cinema 1another was on the left side of the entry point. Opposite Cinema 2 were the male and female toiletscinema 2 was the male and female toilet. The right side of the entry contained the ticket officehad tickets, and next to it was the drinks areawas drinks.
In the current layoutAfter development nowadays, there were no changes tono made changes in the entrance, the ticket office and male and female toiletsticket collection and male and female toilet. However, cinema increased to 5, cinema 2 moves to the north-west corner, next to the toilet, is cinema 1, relocated in the northeast corner new cinema 3 constructed and in the south direction next to cinema 4 and 5 respectively. The food and drinks areaFood drinks shifted to the bottom left corner and a relaxation room was added beside italongside has relaxed room. A DVD shop was added to the right of the ticket officeDVD shops developed in drinks area.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response’s clearest strength is its basic chronological organisation and its identification of the cinema’s expansion from two screens to five. However, frequent grammatical and word-choice errors obscure several descriptions, while the overview omits the removal of the car park and the addition of leisure and retail facilities; prioritise a precise overview, then describe each major relocation and replacement in clear, controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the increase from two cinemas to five and several relocations, but its vague overview omits the loss of the car park and some details are unclear.
State the two main transformations clearly—the car park being replaced by extra screens and the addition or relocation of customer facilities—before comparing specific positions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph, past-versus-present structure gives basic progression, but the final paragraph becomes a difficult sequence of loosely connected locations.
Group the present-day changes by screens and customer facilities, using one clearly linked sentence for each group.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant map vocabulary is attempted, including ‘relocated’ and ‘corner’, but frequent inappropriate choices such as ‘after advancement’ and ‘relaxed room’ reduce precision.
Use standard map-report phrases such as ‘was replaced by’, ‘was relocated to’, and ‘a relaxation room was added’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence structure regularly strain meaning, especially in the description of the current layout.
Build shorter sentences with a clear subject and finite verb, then check singular-plural agreement and passive forms throughout.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Diagrams below show changes in a cinema from 1980 until now,
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