The plans show how a coastal land has developed into a coastal park
Sample Response
The maps describe the transformation of a coastal land into a park.
Overall, the land north of the cliffsthe land in front of the cliff was redevelopedhas been upgraded with several park facilitiesfacilities for park, while the beach beyond the cliffsthe beach behind now has easier access.
Before development, there were farm buildings reached by a short access roadfarm buildings on the side road, in the centre of the coastal land. To the left of these constructions were unused land and an area for animalssea animals’ shelters, whereas the land to the rightthe other side was agricultural land. This area bordered the cliffsfaced the cliff, immediately north of the beach and sea, right in front of the beach and sea.
The place has been converted into a park, and located on the side road at present is a car park. A footpath was built from the west to the east, surrounding a new lake on the west and woods on the east. Trees were plantedgrown around the lake and woodsalong the path to provide more shade, and a new coffee shop was builtinstalled north-east of the car parkbehind the car park. The cliffs along the southern edgeThe cliff in the front now has steps to provide access to the beachto allow more visitors to the beach.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its clear before-and-after organization and its selection of most major changes, making the transformation easy to follow. Its main limitation is imprecise wording about some locations and features, including the animal area and the café. The highest priority is to describe each mapped feature with exact spatial language and more natural collocations so that the account is consistently accurate and fluent.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and most major developments are presented accurately, though a few features and spatial relationships are described imprecisely.
Check every location and label against the maps, especially the animal area, paths, café, and access to the beach.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from an overview to clearly separated descriptions of the land before and after development.
Make comparisons between corresponding old and new features more explicit within the body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient topic-specific vocabulary, but awkward collocations such as facilities for park and installed a coffee shop reduce precision.
Use natural map-reporting phrases such as park facilities, a café was built, and land formerly used for animals.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentence forms is generally controlled, with only occasional article, preposition, and phrasing errors.
Proofread articles and prepositions in phrases describing facilities and relative positions.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans show how a coastal land has developed into a coastal park
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