The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
Sample Response
The bar chart depicts the diverse type of transportation utilizes for commuting from the workplace in Europe in three decades.
Most of the people use pedestrians in 1960, which was only 2 percent less who were using car in 2000. After two decadesAfter two-decade, almost half the people who were using feet for travel started using other modes. In 2000 there were only 10% of people10 percent people who walkedwho were walker. InWhereas, In 1980 exactly 25% of people travelled by carthere were exactly 25 percent individuals who were using their car. This figure was only 7%Which was only 7 two decades earlierbefore two decades.
Furthermore, bus use fluctuatedFluctuation has been noticed in the use of busses , increasing in 1980 before decreasing by 10 percentage pointswhich was inclined in 1980, and it again decreased by 10 percent in 2000. On the other hand, about 27% of people used bicyclesMost people prefer to use their two-wheeler in 1960, a figure that decreased by 5 percentage pointswhich decreased up to 5 percent within twenty years. A sudden fall has been noticed in the ratio who operated bikes that were equal to the ratio using the car in 1960.
Overall, the use of bicycles fellusage of bikes was observed has been to fall with time. PreferenceWhereas, preference for cars increased over timewas increased by the time. On the other hand, the proportion travelling by bus remained broadly similarpeople who travel by bus have almost remained the same even after forty years.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the broad rise in car use and falls in cycling and walking, and it includes several relevant figures. However, frequent grammatical and word-choice errors make comparisons awkward or unclear, while the overview omits the major decline in walking. Prioritise accurate sentence structures and transport vocabulary so that each trend and comparison can be understood immediately.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Several main trends and values are accurate, but the overview omits walking and some comparisons are insufficiently clear or fully developed.
State all dominant changes in the overview, especially the sharp fall in walking and the strong rise in car use, then support them systematically.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a recognisable structure and groups some modes together, but fragments and mechanical linkers interrupt progression.
Use complete sentences and organise the details by increasing modes versus decreasing modes instead of repeatedly adding contrast markers.
Lexical Resource
There is some relevant transport and trend vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate choices such as 'use pedestrians,' 'inclined,' and 'operated bikes' cause difficulty.
Learn and apply standard combinations such as 'travelled on foot,' 'rose,' 'fell,' and 'cycled to work.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and clause construction reduce clarity despite attempts at complex forms.
Build complete subject-verb sentences first and check agreement and comparison patterns before adding subordinate clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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