The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world.
Sample Response
The three pie charts give information about global coffee production, consumption and profit distribution among four coffee-industry groupsprofit from numerous coffee-related businesses. Overall, Europeans and Americans drink the largest shares of coffee consumptionhighest amount of coffee while South Africa is the largestbiggest producer. Additionally, the coffee delivery sectorservice is the recipient of the largest profit sharemost profitable business among those compared. To begin with, citizens of Europe and America consume coffee four times as much as the rest of the world. Japan, which accounts for 18% of global productionwhose production accounts for 18% internationally, consumes onlyonly consume 8%a mere 8% of global coffee. Notably,It is worth noticing that South Africa produces 44% of the coffee (more than anywhere else), which is exactly twiceexactly double than the coffee production in Indonesia - the second-largest coffee producerthe country that makes the second-largest coffee. Along with South Africa, Indonesia and Japan, Vietnam also producesharvests coffee and it accounts for 16% of global productionthe amount is 16%. Regarding profit distribution, it can be seen that 51% of the total profitmore than half of it goes to the coffee delivery industry. Retailers get approximately a quarter while the figure for the share received by coffee producerscoffee producers' profit is only 15 per cent. The remaining 10 per cent is what exporters receive.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response provides a clear overview and covers all three charts with accurate, well-chosen comparisons, especially the combined consumption contrast and the production ranking. The main limitation is occasional imprecise phrasing and grammar, such as the comparison of South Africa with Indonesia, while the single-block organisation slightly weakens presentation. Separate the overview and detail groups, and refine comparative structures and collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three charts are addressed through an accurate overview and well-selected figures and comparisons.
For even fuller precision, state Europe’s and America’s individual consumption shares as well as their combined contrast.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves clearly through consumption, production, and profit, with appropriate linking despite being presented as one block.
Use separate paragraphs for the overview and grouped details to make the three datasets easier to scan.
Lexical Resource
There is a good range of topic vocabulary, though a few phrases such as makes the second-largest coffee are imprecise.
Prefer exact collocations such as second-largest producer and share of total profit.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are used with generally good control, while isolated agreement and comparative-form errors remain.
Correct forms such as Japan consumes and exactly double the figure for Indonesia.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world.
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