The chart below shows the internet users (in millions) in different countries in the Middle East as of June 2017.
Sample Response
The given horizontal bar chart presents information aboutrepresents the information about internet usersusers of the internet in different countriesdistinct nations of the Middle East as of June 2017in the year 2017. The calibration is done in millions.
As shown by the graph, the most striking feature about Iran country is that the majority of the populace used the internet, which was approximately 56.7 million people. Followed by Saudi Arabia population that was recorded at 24.15 million, and Iraq was in the third position in using browser with 14 million individuals.
Looking more closely at the dataFurther scrutinizing the data, the United Arab EmiratesUnited Arab Emirates had aboutalso contributed towards the internet usage that was about 8.52 million. After that, YemenYamen and Israel both had moderate internet useconsumption with 6.91 million and 6.64 million, respectively. In addition to this, Jordan had 6.3 million users, compared with 6.03 million in SyriaJordan and Syria had remained the same at 6.3 million users. FinallyAt last, Lebanonthe Lebanon nation had the lowest number of internet usersbare usage of browser with 4.6 million.
Overall, it can be seen that two largest internet-user populations were in Iran and Saudi Arabiamajority of the population tends to use the internet from Iran nation and Saudi Arabia, whereas Lebanon had the smallest number of usersa minority of the populace is from Lebanon.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response follows the chart's descending pattern and reports nearly all values, making its coverage the strongest feature. Its main limitation is imprecise interpretation: internet-user totals are described as population proportions, and Jordan and Syria are incorrectly reported as equal. Prioritise accurate comparisons and natural statistical language, then proofread sentence structure and country references so the generally clear account reads more precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the highest and lowest countries and reports most figures accurately, but it misreads totals as population shares and conflates Jordan's 6.3 million with Syria's 6.03 million.
Describe the scale of the gaps between the leading countries and verify every value and claim directly against the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the largest value to the smallest across clear paragraphs, although linking is sometimes mechanical and one sentence is an incomplete fragment.
Use complete comparative sentences and group related countries by size instead of relying on sequencing phrases such as 'After that' and 'At last'.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in reporting vocabulary, but frequent awkward collocations such as 'using browser', 'internet consumption', and country names used as modifiers reduce precision.
Prefer standard chart language such as 'internet users', 'recorded', 'stood at', and 'the figure for Iran'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, but recurring article, possessive, agreement, and sentence-boundary errors weaken control.
Proofread country noun phrases and ensure each comparison has a complete subject and finite verb.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the internet users (in millions) in different countries in the Middle East as of June 2017.
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