The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
Sample Response
The given bar graph depicts howthe data about students spending hours studying, relaxing, and sleeping in three countries: the UK, Japan and Germanythree different countries UK, Japan, and Germany.
Overall, the chart shows thatit is seen that in the graph, students in Japan spend the most time studyingin Japan people spend their time studying while students in Germany and the UK spend similar amounts of time studyingwhile in Germany and the UK they spend almost the same hours studying. Relaxing time in the UK and Germany is the same at 7 hours.Relaxing time in UK and Germany remain constant, i.e. 7 Initially, in the UK, many individuals spent the most time sleepingused their paramount hours in sleeping while sleeping and relaxing account for 8.5 and 7 hours, respectivelysleeping and relaxing is noted as 8,7 that is almost the same.
On the other hand, most people spend their timeprecious time studying in Japan compared to relaxing and sleeping.Studying takes the most time in Japanstudying is more famous in Japan. Furthermore, in Germany, students spend 8 hours sleepingstudents used their 8 hours for sleeping, 9 hours studying and 7 hours relaxing9 hours for studying and 7 hours for relaxing.
Finally, in Japan relaxation time is the lowestrelaxing hours are least as compared to the other two countries whereas the UK and Germanywhereas UK and Germany spend 7 hours on relaxation. Individuals from the UK, as well as Germany, spend around 8 hours sleeping rather to Japan. Students inof Japan spend only four hoursused their less couple of hours for relaxing.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the main contrast that Japanese students study most and notes several accurate figures for Germany and the shared relaxation total in the UK and Germany. Its main weakness is incomplete and imprecise reporting of the UK and Japan figures, compounded by repetition and frequent awkward language. Prioritise a systematic country-by-country comparison using all nine values and straightforward, grammatically complete sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a relevant overview and some correct comparisons, but it omits key exact figures for Japan and reports several values imprecisely.
State all three values for each country, especially Japan's 7 hours of sleep, 13 of study, and 4 of relaxation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has paragraphing and a broadly understandable sequence, but ideas are repeated and some details are placed awkwardly within the overview.
Keep the overview to the largest patterns, then use two focused detail paragraphs that compare the countries without repeating conclusions.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to communicate the chart's basic trends, but frequent unsuitable collocations such as paramount hours, precious time, and studying is more famous reduce clarity.
Prefer precise chart language such as spent, recorded, highest, lowest, and exceeded instead of decorative or conversational word choices.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent problems with agreement, punctuation, comparison forms, and sentence boundaries reduce accuracy and occasionally disrupt reading.
Write shorter complete comparison sentences and check subject-verb agreement, capitalization, spacing, and comparative structures systematically.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries.
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