The bar chart below provides information about the top ten rice-producing countries in the world in 2015.
Sample Response
The bar chart illustrates the topfirst ten countries (China, India, Indonesia, Bangladesh, Vietnam, Thailand, Burma, Philippines, Brazil and Japan) by rice productionfor Rice growth in the world in 2015. The X-axis depicts rice productionthe Rice produced in thousands of tonsin thousand tons, and the Y – axis depicts the ten countriesthe list of the top ten countries. Overall, China produced the most ricegrows the highest rice production among the tenother countries.
Among the ten nations, China produced the largest quantity of ricegrew the highest quantity of Rice, with approximately 145 thousand tons of ricemore than 145 thousand tons of Rice in 2015, whereas India produced approximately 105 thousand tons of rice115 thousand tons of Rice, ranking secondstanding in second place in the list. While Indonesia ranked third, producingis in third place with turned out 35,000 tons of ricerice grains, Bangladesh produced slightly less atis slightly less with 33,000 tons Deleterespectively, and Vietnam ranked fifth and producedis in fifth place and produced 30,000 tons of Rice in 2015.
Furthermore, Rice generated by the remaining countries were less than 20,000 tons. Brazil and Japan processed an equal amount of quantity of with12,000 tons of Rice in 2015.
In Conclusion, the top ten countries that produced Rice in the world in the year 2015 are visualized in bar chart form, China is in first place, and India is in Second place, approximately.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the dominant position of China and India and organises the figures into higher and lower producers. However, coverage is incomplete and several values are inaccurate, most notably India's output and the claim that Brazil and Japan produced equal amounts. The highest-priority improvement is to select a fuller set of comparisons and check each figure carefully, while avoiding repetitive introductory and concluding material.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A basic overview and several leading figures are provided, but important countries are omitted and multiple values or comparisons are inaccurate.
Report accurate approximate figures for a representative range of countries, including Thailand, Burma and the Philippines, and distinguish Brazil from Japan.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable structure and generally moves from higher to lower producers, though the conclusion largely repeats earlier information.
Use the final paragraph for an additional comparison or remove it, and group the lower-producing countries more systematically.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for describing a chart, but frequent inaccurate collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Use standard combinations such as 'produced rice', 'recorded the highest output' and 'an equal amount' with careful variation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex sentences are attempted, but agreement errors and malformed clauses recur and occasionally strain readability.
Check subject-verb agreement and rebuild fragments such as 'with turned out' and 'an equal amount of quantity of with12,000'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below provides information about the top ten rice-producing countries in the world in 2015.
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