The pie chart gave information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 Billion.
Sample Response
The yielded pie charts demonstrate the USA authority released and spending money in 2000. AED 315 billion was the total amount.
Overall, the majority of money spent on social security while for transport least money released.
For the law and order sectorFor law and order sector UAEUSA government spent AED17 billion; however, just over half that amountroughly below half of that budget was for transport. AED 100 billion was allocated to social securitywas released to the social security field, which had more than a quarter of the totalmore than a quarter proportion. AED 53 billion53 billion AED was for health and personal social services. Debt interest and other expenditureexpenses received equal allocationshad the same released fund of AED 23 billion eachon account of 23 billion. Furthermore, defence received AED 1 billion lessjust 1 billion less money was for defence than debt interest.
AED 15 billion and AED 13 billion were spentThe spent 15 billion and 13 billion AED was for housing, heritage and the environmenthousing heritage and environment field and industry, agriculture and employmentindustry agriculture & emoluments, respectively. The education department received AED 38 billionhad 38 AED billion released funds.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the largest and smallest allocations and reports nearly every category with figures that largely match the chart. Its coverage is weakened by being slightly under length, repeatedly naming the country as the USA rather than the UAE, and presenting most details as a list with limited comparison; frequent language errors also reduce clarity. The priority is to correct the context and group the spending categories into meaningful comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the main extremes and most figures are accurate, but the country is misidentified and the short response offers limited comparative selection.
Refer consistently to the UAE and compare the largest allocations with the medium and smallest spending groups while meeting the 150-word minimum.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a recognizable introduction-overview-details structure, though the detail paragraphs mainly list categories and some references are awkward.
Group related amounts together and use clear comparison links to show which allocations were similar, higher, or lower.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers the topic, but ‘released’ is repeatedly misused for spending and several noun phrases are inaccurate or awkward.
Use precise phrases such as ‘allocated,’ ‘government expenditure,’ ‘accounted for,’ and ‘the smallest allocation.’
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally recoverable, but frequent errors in articles, verb forms, agreement, and sentence structure limit grammatical accuracy.
Practise complete comparison sentences with correct articles and passive forms, such as ‘AED 100 billion was allocated to social security.’
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart gave information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 Billion.
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