The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.
Sample Response
The table illustrates how much money an average family in a UK city earned and spent on food and clothespaid for food and clothes, while the pie charts represent the proportion of spending on those categories in 2010 and 2013.
It is clear that while the total income of an average family in a UK citythe total income of an average British family decreased between 2010 and 2013, the amount of money spent on food and clothing increased. Additionally, the average family spent much more on food than on clothes in both yearsBritish people spent much more money on food than on clothes in both years.
According to the table, in 2010, an average British family earned £29,000, while £14,000nearly half of that amount was used for food and clothes. In 2013, the average income of a family in Britain fell to about £25,000, while there was a growth of £1,000 in the expenditure for food and clothes.
Regarding the pie charts, the percentage for spending on meat and fish was highest among all categories in 2010, at 29%, but threev years later experienced a drop to 23%. Similarly, the share spent on clothes fella downward trend was seen in the figure for clothes, from 15% to 13% in 2013. On the other hand, people seemed to spend more money on fruit, vegetables, and dairy products as the figures went up to 30% and 16% respectively. Meanwhile, the proportion of spending on other food remained unchanged at exactly 18%.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response gives a clear overview and accurately reports the main income, expenditure, and category trends, with well-controlled organisation and sentence structures. Its main limitation is that some wording is slightly awkward and the 2010 figures for fruit and vegetables and dairy products are only implied through their later values. Prioritise more precise collocations and fully state both endpoints when describing changes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and accurately selects nearly all major figures and changes from the table and pie charts.
State the 2010 percentages for fruit and vegetables and dairy products explicitly so that every reported change has both endpoints.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview to the table and pie-chart details, with clear paragraphing and effective linking.
Make links within comparison sentences slightly more direct when shifting from one year to the other.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, although phrases such as "percentage for spending" and "expenditure for" are mildly awkward.
Use more natural data-reporting collocations such as "the proportion spent on" and "expenditure on" consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used with strong control, and the few lapses do not impede meaning.
Proofread comparative clauses to remove slips such as "threev years" and ensure each clause has a clearly expressed subject.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.
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