The following chart illustrates the results of a British survey taken in 2005 related to Housing preferences of UK people.
Sample Response
The given bar graph shows data on the housing preferences of UK citizens and these data were collectedthis data was taken as part of a survey conducted in 2005survey made on 2005. As is observed from the data, most of the London residentsdwellers preferred flats while detached and semi-detached housesdetached & semi-detached houses were more popular among the people of Oxford and Cambridge. As is presented in the bar graph, about 58% of London citizens58% citizen of London preferred flats while less than 30% of people in Oxford and Cambridgeless than 30% people of Oxford and Cambridge preferred flats as their preferred housing typeas their housing. Interestingly people from all three citiesall those three cities preferred terracedterrace houses in similar proportionsin a similar percentage which is around 15-18 %. The least preferred housing type among LondonersLeast preferred housing type for London people was detached houses which were preferred by less than 10% of London citizens while this housing type was preferred by about 25% of Oxford residents25% Oxford people and 35% of Cambridge residents35% Cambridge people. Finally, semi-detached houses were more popularpreferred by Oxford and Cambridge people (about 27%) and only 17% of London residents17% people from London preferred this sort of housing. To summarise, the survey result summarises that flat was the most preferred housing solution for London people while Oxford and Cambridge's people preferred detached and semi-detached housing.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report covers every housing type, makes useful city comparisons, and presents most percentages accurately. Its principal weakness is the repeated claim that Oxford preferred detached or semi-detached homes, although flats were marginally its leading choice; correct that overview first, then improve sentence-level accuracy with plural nouns, articles, prepositions, and possessive forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and covers all categories with mostly accurate comparisons, but it misidentifies Oxford’s leading preference.
Revise the overview to state that flats were slightly highest in Oxford, while detached houses clearly led only in Cambridge.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from an overview to category-by-category comparisons, though paragraphing and some linking feel mechanical.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs and reduce repetitive framing such as “As is observed” and “As is presented.”
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for describing preferences and comparisons, but repetition and awkward choices such as “housing solution” limit flexibility.
Use more natural alternatives such as “housing type” or “preferred accommodation” and avoid repeatedly using forms of “prefer.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, but recurring errors with agreement, articles, prepositions, and possessives reduce accuracy.
Correct forms such as “in 2005,” “58% of citizens,” and “people in Cambridge” throughout the report.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The following chart illustrates the results of a British survey taken in 2005 related to Housing preferences of UK people.
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