The graph below gives information about international migration to the UK, 1999-2008.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the migrationresettlement of people moving to and from the UKoversea individuals to the UK from 1999 to 2008in nine years.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the graph that individuals who shifted to the UK had forward with great numbers, while people who got emigrated to another country had the lowest value from immigrated.
To begin with, immigrationthe people who chose the final destination began at approximately 450,000nearby 46,000 in 1999; this figureratio shot sharply from about 450,000 to nearly 590,000from 46 to 60,000 after five years, with the net migrationtotal net population approximately 25020,000. Moreover, emigrationthe situation of individuals moving to another nation from the UK began at approximately 29030,000 while net migration was about 160,000 in 1999with a net ratio of 80,000 in 1999 and generally increased over the periodcontinuously surged up over the years and reached about 400,000 in 2006, while net migration was about 200,000reached 40,000 along with 20,000 net number of emigrants. DeleteUnfortunately, emigration drastically fell to about 340,000 in 2007declined by 60,000 in 2007; afterwards, it rose to its peak of about 420,000 in 2008reached its peak of 40,000 people emigrated to other nations in 2008.
Furthermore, the total net value of immigration and emigration was observed at nearly 80,000 in 1999 and continuously remained the same after two years; suddenly, this number declined with a nominal margin of 50,000 in 2003. It is interesting to note that this trend breakthrough at its peak, more than 20,000 individuals decided on their final destination and plunged to 20,000 value in the final year.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a recognizable structure and identifies the broad relationship between immigration and emigration, which provides a partial overview. Its main limitation is serious numerical inaccuracy and unclear labelling: most figures are reported at the wrong scale, net migration is repeatedly confused with the other series, and several comparisons are difficult to interpret. Prioritize reading the axes carefully and organizing accurate comparisons around the three data series.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A broad overview is attempted, but key figures are repeatedly mis-scaled or confused, and the three series are not described reliably.
Check the units and extract a small set of accurate immigration, emigration, and net-migration comparisons before drafting.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing separates the introduction, overview, and details, but progression is weakened by unclear references and disconnected comparisons.
Group details by data series or time period and make each comparison's subject explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations such as final destination and net ratio obscure the intended data.
Use standard chart terms such as immigration, emigration, net migration, rose, fell, and remained stable with precise meanings.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex sentences, but frequent errors in clause structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms regularly reduce clarity.
Use shorter comparative sentences with a clear subject, verb, figure, and year, then check each clause for agreement and tense.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below gives information about international migration to the UK, 1999-2008.
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