The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
Sample Response
The pieBar charts illustrate percentages of water usewater usage in percentage for different purposesvarious needs in six different areas worldwide. Mainly, water is used in three categories: industrial, agricultural, and domesticindustrial, Agricultural and domestic.
Overall, among the various categories, the largest shares are generally used for agriculturethe highest percentage of water used is for Agricultural and farming needs in the world, and the smallest shares are for domestic or industrial purposesthe minuscule percentage used is for Domestic reasons.
In North America, 48% of water is usednecessary for the industrial purposesIndustrial segment, 39% is used for agricultural use, and the remaining 13% is used for domestic purposesrequirements. Whereas in South America, the highest with 71% of water, is needed for agriculture and with 19% for domestic purposes and with Lowest per cent with 10%, for industrial usage. However, Europe usesEurope is using 53% of its water for industrial purposesthe highest percentage of water for Industrial needs and 32% for the agricultureAgricultural group and only 15% for domestic purposes.
In the remaining regionscountries such as Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia, the highest percentage of water is used for agriculturerequired for Agricultural basis at between 81% and 88%at 88%, whereas for domestic needs between 7% and 9% of water is usedonly 7 to 9 per cent of water is used and for industrial usage, the water used is approximately 5% to 12%5 to 12 percentage approximately.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response has a clear four-paragraph structure and reports the figures for North America, South America, and most of Europe accurately. Its main limitation is that the overview overgeneralizes agricultural and domestic use, while the final paragraph merges three regions and incorrectly assigns 88% to all of them. The priority is to compare the regional patterns explicitly and preserve each region's exact values in grammatically complete sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most principal figures are covered and several regional patterns are clear, but the overview misses the industrial exceptions and the final three agricultural shares are conflated.
Contrast Europe and North America with the other regions, and report the distinct agricultural figures of 84%, 88%, and 81%.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical introduction-overview-detail structure and groups regions sensibly, though a few sentence openings and references are awkward.
Use complete comparison sentences and make each contrast refer explicitly to the relevant region and use category.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary range is adequate for describing proportions, but repetition and unnatural combinations such as agricultural basis and 12 percentage limit precision.
Prefer accurate terms such as agricultural use, accounted for, proportion, and percentage points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are both used and meaning remains clear, although article, capitalization, preposition, and clause-structure errors recur.
Edit for complete clauses after linking words and apply consistent lower-case category labels with correct articles and prepositions.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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