For the past year you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter: - state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this - give details of how you have benefited from the club - explain why you want to leave

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Sample Response

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Dear Sir or Madam,Dear Sir,

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In September 2003, I joined your Sports and Social club as a full-time student member. Since then I have paid the monthly membership feefees by direct debit from my account at Nationwide on Sanderson Avenue in Kinghillmy bank: Nationwide in Sanderson Avenue, Kinghill.

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I have thoroughly enjoyed my club membership as it has provided me with useful opportunities to meetmeet up with other young people and to participate in a number of social activities. I have also been able to playfortunate enough to play in some of the inter-club tennis tournaments and have taken advantage of the various available classes, such asclasses available such as Yoga and T’ai chi.

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However, my studies are now coming to an end and as I will shortly be returning to my home country, Deletepossibly for good, I regret that I am unableI regret that I no longer wish to continue my membership.

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I would be grateful, therefore, if you could confirm in writing that the monthly fee will no longer be deducted from my bank account. Yours faithfully, [Name]bank account.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The letter is clear, polished, and appropriately formal, with all three content requirements addressed through specific, relevant detail. Its only notable limitation is that the ending lacks a conventional complimentary close and name, although this does not obscure the purpose. The highest-priority refinement is to add a complete formal sign-off while maintaining the same concise development and precise control.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The purpose is immediately clear, all three bullet points are fully addressed, and the formal tone is consistently appropriate.

Next step

Add a conventional complimentary close and name to complete the formal letter format.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0
Scoring rule

Information progresses logically through membership details, benefits, the reason for leaving, and the requested action, with effective paragraphing.

Next step

Preserve this clear progression while making the final request and closing a fully formed concluding paragraph.

LR

Lexical Resource

8.0
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is varied and precise, with natural phrases such as "direct debit," "take advantage of," and "coming to an end."

Next step

Continue refining collocational precision and avoid unnecessary qualifiers such as "possibly for good" unless they add essential meaning.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0
Scoring rule

A wide range of complex structures is used accurately, and the response is almost entirely error-free.

Next step

Maintain this high level of control while checking punctuation and sentence economy in longer constructions.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

For the past year you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter:

- state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this

- give details of how you have benefited from the club

- explain why you want to leave

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