For the past year, you have been a local club member. Now you want to end your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter: - State what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this? - Give details of how you have benefited from the club? - Explain why you want to leave?
Sample Response
Dear Sir,
I hope this letterepistle finds you in excellent health. I want to inform you that I have decided to cancelcease my membership with the Rotary Clubprestigious Rotary Club in our vicinity after volunteering for a year as I am relocating to Sydney.
Furthermore, I have a premium membershiphad taken the premium membership as it includes many social events and visits to orphanagesit comprises many social events and visiting orphanages. I have always wantedalways had the motivation to provide financial assistance to underprivileged children, and thus I joined the clubthis group. At the time of enrollment, I made an online transaction of $300300 bucks directly to the club’s bank account. I believe that this fee covers another six monthsthis fee is valid for another six months. However, I request you to donate the remaining amountprovide it as a donation to charitable organisationsdestitute societies rather than a refund.
Moreover, it was a rewardingfascinating experience, and I willwould cherish the amazing moments of social service throughout my life. I was deeply gratefuldeeply overwhelmed with gratitude when we visited an orphanage and donated books, uniforms, and stationery items to underprivilegedpoor children.
Additionally, I am pleased to inform youelated to share that I have received an employment opportunity with a conglomerateconglomerate company in Sydney, which I had wanted for monthswhich I had been longing for months. I will be leaving for Australia on Monday. During my vacations, I intendensure to visit our club and make ample contributions.
Thank you for everything, and I hope to see you soonand hope to see you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter fully covers the membership type and payment, the benefits gained, and the reason for leaving, with clear organization and substantial supporting detail. Its strongest feature is the purposeful development of each bullet point, while its main limitation is an overly ornate style with several imprecise collocations. The highest-priority improvement is to choose simpler, more natural formal vocabulary and maintain consistently appropriate register.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The communicative purpose is clear, and every bullet point is appropriately extended with specific, relevant information.
Maintain a consistently formal register by replacing informal wording such as '300 bucks' and stating the cancellation request as directly as possible.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically sequenced into clear paragraphs, although the repeated paragraph-opening linkers make cohesion somewhat formulaic.
Vary progression by letting the subject matter connect paragraphs naturally instead of opening successive paragraphs with 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Additionally'.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of less common vocabulary is attempted, but several choices and collocations are strained or inappropriate for the context.
Prefer natural formal expressions such as 'letter', 'cancel my membership', 'donate the remaining fee', and 'large company' over unnecessarily elaborate alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The letter contains varied complex structures and many accurate sentences, with a small number of tense and construction errors.
Refine verb patterns and time references, particularly 'I had taken the premium membership' and 'During my vacations, I ensure to visit'.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
For the past year, you have been a local club member. Now you want to end your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter:
- State what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this?
- Give details of how you have benefited from the club?
- Explain why you want to leave?
Your response
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