You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter: - Explain why you have moved - Describe the new apartment - Invite him to pay a visit

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Sample Response

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Dear Anthony, It is with great pleasure that I'm writing to you today since it's almost two months since we last saw each other, I really miss all the quality time we spent together during the summer last yearduring summer last year.I am writing this letter to inform you that I have recently moved from my old apartment to a new onemoved out of my old apartment to a new one. The main reason I moved out of my old apartment wasThe major reason why I had to move out of my old apartment is because of the security problems in the area.As you can really the panic mode we both experienced because of the constant gunshot sound we heard everyday during late night on your last visit and also the lack of basic amenities like electricity, constant water and good road channel also played it's part on why I had to move out of my old apartment into a new one. IAnd also I believe you're going to love my new apartment as it is a new, fully furnished, four-bedroom detached duplexnew fully furnished four bedroom detached duplex along Ajah road with a massive kitchen downstairs and a very large living room.It also has a car parkIt also have carpark,beautiful dark green paintworka beautiful dark green painting and also a fancy gate and a large compoundcompund for the children to use as a playgroundfor children's playground. I will be very happy if you and the children can come for a visit this coming Christmas. IChristmas,I have missed them very muchalot and here is my new address No. 7Num.7 John Streetstreet,along Ajah road ifincase you decide to show up with your children. All the best, John

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response covers all three points with specific details and maintains a warm, friendly relationship with the recipient. Its main limitation is frequent loss of control in long sentences, where missing punctuation, grammar errors, and awkward wording sometimes make the message difficult to follow. Prioritise dividing the letter into short, purposeful paragraphs and sentences, then check agreement, possessives, articles, and spelling before submitting.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.0
Scoring rule

All three bullet points are addressed with relevant reasons, a detailed description of the new home, and a clear personal invitation.

Next step

Keep the friendly detail while making the opening more concise so the purpose emerges immediately.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5
Scoring rule

The content follows the requested order, but run-on sentences, absent paragraphing, and repetitive linking weaken progression and readability.

Next step

Create separate paragraphs for the reason, description, and invitation, and connect shorter sentences with varied cohesive devices.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

The response uses an adequate range, including some specific housing and neighbourhood vocabulary, but spelling and collocation errors recur.

Next step

Check forms and collocations such as everyday versus every day, a lot, in case, car park, and constant water supply.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0
Scoring rule

Meaning is generally recoverable, but frequent errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, possessives, articles, and clause construction reduce control.

Next step

Write shorter complete sentences and systematically check subject-verb agreement, apostrophes, and punctuation before combining ideas.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking Friend. In your letter:

- Explain why you have moved

- Describe the new apartment

- Invite him to pay a visit

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