You forget your bag in the gym and the gym management announced that it will be closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has important things in it. Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter: - introduce yourself and describe your position - give them a description of your bag - tell them what you want them to do
Sample Response
Dear Mr Andrew, I am a regular member of your True Fitness Gym atin the West Delhi branch. I went to the gym last Friday, as usual, however, I was in a bit hurry for an official meeting and I forgot my bag in cupboard 167. Today I learned that the gymnasium will be closed for a week but I need the bag urgently. I am hoping that you canwould arrange a way to hand over the bag to me. My access card number is 99876 and I have been a member since the beginning of 2021. The managementauthority has announced that the gym will be closed for renovation work but I need my bag along with its contentscontent urgently. My bag is black and has three zippers, one in the middle and two on the sides. It has my workofficial laptop and wallet, which containswallet which includes my driving license and credit cards along with some cash. I need themwould need them before I go to the office tomorrow morning. I would request you to kindly instruct your member of staffward boy to assist me in getting the bag from the cupboard when I come to the gym tomorrow morning. I understand the inconvenience this might cause you, and I would really appreciate your help. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Gaurav Verma
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter communicates the situation and requested action very clearly, supported by specific identifying details about the member, cupboard, bag, and contents. Its main limitation is uneven linguistic polish: the closure and urgency are repeated, while several articles and collocations are inaccurate. Streamline the repeated information and correct phrases such as in a bit of a hurry to produce a more concise, natural formal request.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All required points are fully addressed in a suitably polite formal letter, and the requested action is precise and practical.
Avoid repeating the renovation and urgency details so that every sentence contributes new information.
Coherence and Cohesion
The message follows a clear sequence from situation to identification, description, and request, though repetition and one-block presentation reduce cohesion.
Organise the response into short paragraphs and mention the gym closure only once.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied and specific, but choices such as in a bit hurry, its content, and the authority are occasionally unnatural.
Use idiomatic phrases such as in a bit of a hurry, its contents, and the gym management.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer uses several complex sentences accurately, with occasional article, punctuation, and agreement errors that do not impede meaning.
Proofread articles and sentence boundaries, particularly around introductory clauses and coordinated clauses.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You forget your bag in the gym and the gym management announced that it will be closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has important things in it. Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter:
- introduce yourself and describe your position
- give them a description of your bag
- tell them what you want them to do
Your response
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