Some people believe that animal husbandry is the biggest factor causing global warming. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
The biggest challenge that human beings face in this world is global warmingthe global warming. This problem has been a concern of most scientists around the world since the temperature of the earth was seen having an increase which means that there is an unbalance in the earth air compositions. Animal husbandry is being judged as the biggest contributor to this issue due to the methane emittedexhausted by ruminants. However, this, in my viewperspective, is not truenot the truth but just a result of political necessity.
Animal husbandry cannot be blamed as the biggest cause of global warming for several reasonsowing to some reasons. First of all, human beings cannot deny their need for essential protein, which isrequirements of essential proteins which are mostly obtained from animals such as cattle, goats, chickens, etc. Currently, beef, a product from cattle which is one type of ruminants, has been fulfilling the demand for proteinproteins demand worldwide because it is one of the most productive livestock animalsmost productive and reproductive animals with a fairly short calving intervala quite short interval calving (being able to produce one calf per cow per year and achieving a slaughtering age of three to four years). Secondly, the methane produced by the animals is actually harmful to the world when the number of plants decreases dramatically and not be taken into account as a serious problem. It should be more trees planted and more reforestations done to balance the production of animals. Therefore, the cooperation across all agricultural sectorscollaboration between all sectors of agriculture is genuinely needed.
On the other hand, numerous other factors are also contributing substantially to increasing amountsconsiderably leading to an increasing amount of greenhouse gases such as Carbon dioxide in the atmosphere. These are, for example, industries burning petroleum-based fuelsindustries using petrol gases and an increasing number of fuel-based vehicles, which are driven by the needswhich required by the need for the expanding human population around the globe.
However, this is not as easy as it is thought. The more research is required to be conducted in order to measure to what extent this globe has experienced this seriousfrustrating problem and of course, how much the methane from animal husbandry contributed invites a more meticulous study to not casually conclude that it is the most significant contributing factormost horrible haunting factor.
All in all, to stop the rise in greenhouse gases, appropriate measuresan appropriate number of measures should be implementedconducted. There is no need to just blame one crucial suspicious contributive sector without any actions.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear disagreement and uses an appropriate essay structure, with relevant awareness of methane and other emission sources. Its main limitation is that several arguments are weakly supported or logically questionable, especially the discussion of protein needs and plants offsetting methane, while frequent awkward grammar reduces precision. The priority is to build two directly relevant, evidence-based reasons and express them in clearer, more controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained, but development is uneven because some reasons are only loosely relevant or insufficiently justified.
Support the disagreement with two well-explained comparisons showing why other causes contribute more than animal husbandry.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organised into purposeful paragraphs and progresses broadly logically, though some links between claims are strained.
Give each body paragraph one central claim and make every following sentence explain or illustrate that claim directly.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers the topic with some range, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices make expression unnatural.
Prioritise precise, conventional combinations such as methane emitted by livestock and demand for protein over elaborate wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures is attempted, but recurring article, agreement, and clause-construction errors reduce clarity.
Use shorter complex sentences with clearly matched subjects and verbs, then check articles and passive constructions systematically.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that animal husbandry is the biggest factor causing global warming. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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