In recent years, life has become more stressful than it has ever been. As a consequence, more and more people are suffering from stress-related problems. What factors are contributing to this increase and what do you think can be done to overcome the current problems.
Sample Response
Life has become more stressful than ever. People seem unable to findPeople seems like cannot find a successful path due to stress related problem. Mentally distressed people have problemsMentally disturbed one have problems in each and every step of the life. In my opinion, people should have stress but not an excessive level of stressnot across the inordinate level of stress in day to day life. Higher competition, higher expenses, limited resources, higher expectations and globalisationmore expectation and globalizations are the main reasons for this increased stress in our life. Having realistic ambitions in life, living a positive life, better family bonding and being honest and contentcontended are the main ways of overcoming this problem. I believe that higher competition in every step of life is the most common reason for our stress. I believed that the stress arises in our mindshas taken place into our mind due to the lack of our self-confidence. Main reason behind the stress is not havingis to not having a clear vision towards foreseeable future. Many people could not anticipate their aim and objectives in life. MostMostly people who are always struggling to reach their goalsjumbling for their destinations tend to face stress in day to day activities. A person in stress neither gets an opportunity in life nor lives happilynor live the life happily. People in stress just waste their time blaming otherswaste their time for blaming others for their problem. Higher living expenses force people to work more and that can reach 10 to 14 hourshas reached to over 10-14 hours in many professions. Limited resources and the higher population have made it impossible to have a decent life without competing. This is another reason people nowadays face more job-related stress than ever before. Many people are not contented with whatever they have and they are always in stress. Globalisation has opened the doors of new possibility and along with it new expectations. This is another reason that can be contributed to the stress. The environment pollution and junk food that we usually eat reduced our level of fitness and physical illness and mental stress are correlated.
Again, frustration and depression are the reasons for mental stress for people and drug abuse, family issues and social perspectives could be attributed to these. Stress decreases the efficiency of people at workon job. People with such pressure also fail to manage good relationship within home and outside. Such people cannot become happy as well as people around themhim are also affected.
There are many steps that the individuals and the society can take to make our life stress free. First of all, we have to learn to be contented and satisfied. Without being self-contented no one can ever overcome this problem. Proper planning, punctuality and better family bonding can solve this problem to some extent. We should live our life in a decent way and should always be honest not to question our own honesty and integrity. As far as I am concerned, sometimes, I have suffered from stress about my career growthI have suffered for my career growth stress. But I did not cross the inordinate level of stress. I immediately focus on the situationconcentrate towards the situation and find the problem myself and I try my best to come out from stress by making a proper plan and solve the problem as soon as possible.
Again, the cumulative effort to be happy and contended by each family member can contribute to a great deal. We should keep our body fit and do exercise daily. It is medically proven that proper exercise helps us reduce our stress. We should pick up hobbies, travel to new placestravel new places and read frequently to remove our stress. We also can travel to naturally beautiful places to reduce stresses of our mind. Travelling creates an opportunity to encounter new circumstances and helps refresh our mindsencounter with new circumstances and help to refresh our mind.
In my opinion, to come out from stress people have to identify the reason of stress and have to start working hard to resolve the problems immediately. If we cannot take immediate actions for our problems and stress, that might create a hazardous situation in foreseeable future.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s strongest feature is its extensive coverage of both causes of stress and possible personal remedies, with a clear attempt to explain several relevant factors. Its main limitation is that the very long, repetitive discussion includes loosely connected or insufficiently developed ideas, while frequent language errors reduce clarity. The highest-priority improvement is to select two or three major causes and matching solutions, organise them concisely, and explain each through a clear causal chain.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts of the task are addressed with many relevant causes and solutions, but development is uneven, repetitive, and occasionally unclear.
Select a smaller number of major causes and develop a directly related solution for each with specific explanation or evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The broad movement from causes to effects and solutions is visible, but oversized paragraphs, repetition, and loose internal sequencing weaken progression.
Use one focused paragraph for each major cause-solution relationship and remove repeated points about contentment, planning, and travel.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough vocabulary to discuss stress, but frequent inaccurate word choices, forms, and collocations often make expression awkward.
Use simpler, reliable expressions and correct recurring phrases such as “suffered for career growth stress” and “stresses of our mind.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, prepositions, and clause construction reduce clarity.
Prioritise complete sentences with accurate subject-verb agreement and verb patterns before attempting longer complex structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In recent years, life has become more stressful than it has ever been. As a consequence, more and more people are suffering from stress-related problems. What factors are contributing to this increase and what do you think can be done to overcome the current problems.
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