Some people think that it is a waste of money for countries to host big sporting events like the World Cup, while others think the opposite. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
It is believed that major international sporting eventsmajor sports events that are celebrated internationally are not worth the investment. While this argument may seem rational to some extent, I’m still of the opinion that the benefits that these events bring are farimmensely more significant than the drawbacks.
It is understandable that some people think the budget allocated to these sports events may be squandered. After allIn the end, it is an enormous expenditurean enormous amount of money that can be a heavybig strain on government coffers. In addition to the extensive infrastructure that will need to be renovatedLeaving aside the grand scale of infrastructure that will need to be renovated, events like these require the workforce involvedlabor force involved to be skilled and sufficiently largebountiful, to ensure that the facilities meet the required standardin order for the facility to reach its desired quality. The preparation is also attributable to many constructions and changes to the infrastructure. This may cause disruption to traffic flowdisruptions in the traffic flow, especially when the host cities are usually the capitals of countries where the population density tends to be higher than that of other regionshigher than other regions.
On the other hand, the financial and cultural profits gained from hostingcelebrating these events are deemed to be immeasurable. First of all, big events such as the Olympics or World Cup are precious opportunities for countries to promote international tourism. This leads to a substantial increase in potential customersa significant surge of prospective customers coming to support businesses and also increases the potential to increase employmentthe chance to improve the employment rate when there is a higher demand for labor in many tourism-related industries. Not only that, achievements in sports also represent the talents of the people of each country. In other words, sports are an important symbol of every nation’s pride and culture. Therefore, hosting sports events like these also helpshelp unite the spirits of citizens, encouraging patriotism and bringing pride to society.
To conclude, despite some inconvenience that being the host of global sports events may cause to the economy and society, I believe this should be seen as an investmentinvesting opportunity that can’t be missed because of the benefitsgood merits that it brings.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response covers both views, states a clear preference, and organises several relevant financial, tourism, employment, and cultural points into an easy-to-follow argument. Its main limitation is recurrent imprecision in word choice and collocation, which sometimes makes otherwise mature ideas sound unnatural; the highest-priority improvement is to choose conventional academic expressions and proofread agreement in complex sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both perspectives are addressed and the writer's opinion is clear, with relevant ideas that are generally extended and supported.
Develop the cost argument more precisely by showing why the expenditure may outweigh lasting benefits rather than mainly describing preparation demands.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged in well-focused paragraphs and progresses logically through a clear discussion of costs and benefits.
Replace slightly awkward linking phrases such as 'Leaving aside' with connections that state the intended relationship more accurately.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is broad and topic-appropriate, but recurrent collocational inaccuracies reduce precision and naturalness.
Use conventional combinations such as 'host events,' 'construction projects,' 'investment opportunity,' and 'substantial benefits.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay shows a varied range of complex structures with generally good control and only occasional noticeable errors.
Check subject-verb agreement and article or noun choices in phrases such as 'hosting sports events ... help' and 'some inconvenience.'
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that it is a waste of money for countries to host big sporting events like the World Cup, while others think the opposite. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
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