Many people believe that education standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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It would be quite right to profess that the decline in educational qualitydeclination of educational quality, particularly in literacy and numeracyliterature and mathematics, has globally grabbed attention among the populace over the last decades. This essay will examineconnote the excessive use of state-of-the-art technological devices by young peoplejuveniles and lack of good teachers as main causes and propose stricter rulessubmit legislating stricter rules for using modern facilities appropriatelyexploiting accurately modern facilities at schools and encouraging talented people to come in the teaching profession as solutions to draw a reasonable conclusion.

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According to a common perception among many, one of the fundamental reasons behind declining educational standardsdecreasing the level of standards concerning education lies in the fact that the young are used to utilise new electronic devices to carry out their assignments. As a case in point, one nephew of mine is accustomed to using his smart mobile phone not only for straightening out all the mathematical tests but for solving simple maths problemsaccounting simplest math questions like multiplying two one-digit numbers. That being so, it is more likely that in the not-so-distant futureno so long distant future, he would not be able to achieve problem-solving abilitiesabilities of problem-solving in the real world being needed in the job market. Besides, students are too busy playing video games or surfing the internettoo busy to play video games or surfing internet that they do not feel interested to read books outside their academic syllabus. Thus their reading habit is a daunting issue these days. Again, the lack of quality teachers who can inspire students is another reason for this decreasing educational standard. Most teachers these days are after money and fame rather than enlighteningenlighting new generations.

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It is obvious that it would not be possible to deal with such cataclysm by a single solution. Some, however, claim that by setting regulation concerning limited usage of technologic devices, particularly at educational centres could pave the road for improving training frameworks. To illustrate, in some European nations, some tough laws have been adopted by the higher ranking authorities in terms of forbidding the use of any kind of electronic facilities in classrooms, especially during the exams among pupils in elementary schools. They have correspondingly realised that the rate of students’ abilities for solving complicated issues gradually increased after a few months. Moreover, more literary works should be added in the syllabus to let students learn their own culture and custom through the reading of that literature. Finally, more facilities should be added for the teacher so that people do not come to teaching profession only because they did not find anything better. In many countries, very few talented people come to the teaching profession in junior level only because the government has not allocated enough facilities for those teachers.

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By way of conclusion, being one of the practical and effective methods of overcoming the dilemma of a low quality of education standards ranging from literature to mathematics, legislating stricter rules for youngsters not exploiting modern facilities at school and attracting more quality teachers could be considered as two effective solutions to cope with somewhat this negative trend.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response is well organised and fully engages with both causes and solutions, supporting its ideas with relevant examples. Its main weakness is that ambitious wording, unnatural collocations, and overloaded sentence structures sometimes obscure otherwise sound arguments. The highest priority is to express each cause and solution in simpler, more natural language, using shorter sentences and one clearly developed example for each main point.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

The response addresses causes and solutions and gives developed examples. It is relevant and ambitious, but some ideas are overcomplicated or imprecisely expressed, which can blur the argument.

Next step

State the two causes and two solutions in simpler language, then develop each with one clear example.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

Paragraphing is clear and progression is logical. Cohesion is sometimes over-managed with heavy phrases that make the writing less natural.

Next step

Use simpler linking phrases and make topic sentences direct rather than highly abstract.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

Vocabulary range is wide, but several choices are inaccurate, over-formal, or used with the wrong collocation.

Next step

Prioritise accurate word choice over rare words; replace terms like "connote," "cataclysm," and "technologic" with natural academic vocabulary.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

The essay uses complex structures, but grammar errors in clauses, articles, and word forms are frequent and sometimes strain readability.

Next step

Shorten the longest sentences and check that each verb has a clear subject and object.

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Many people believe that education standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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