Nowadays we can enjoy the same films, fashions, brands, advertisements and TV channels. The evident difference between countries is disappearing. To what extent do you think the disadvantages overweight the advantages of this?
Sample Response
Globalization creates conditions for expanding international exchangewidening international exchanges, strengthening mutual understanding between nations, expanding cultural, educational, and scientific cooperation among countriesbetween nations and countries, enjoying the cultural achievements of people around the world thereby encouragingwhich encourages the process of modernization and the enrichment of national culture.
However, these conditions also create athe possible danger of diminishing national culturediminishing the national culture with a negative impact on the preservationprevation of national identity. Through globalization and an open door policy, erroneous concepts and a lowering of ethical standards, a selfish and individualistic lifestyle and harmful cultural products can easily be imported into the country. At present, modern information technology which is largely controlled by the USwhich in the main is controlled by US continuously and intensively disseminatesis hourly and intensively disseminating US ideology, way of life, culture and films across the world. Even US food is promoted so that some people regardconsider globalization as Americanizationglobal Americanization.
During the process of economic globalization, inequality between developed and developing countries has been increasing and the gap between the rich and the poor has become wider, most of the result of globalization go to assist developed countries. Globalization does not distribute benefits and risks equallydoes not pose equal interests and risks to all nations. With overwhelming advantages overWith an overwhelming advantage compared to most developing countriesmost of the developing countries in terms of finance and scientific and technological developmentthe level of science and technology, developed countries control the coursesituation of economic globalization.
For these reasons, globalization is a source of fierce and complex conflicta fierce and complicated struggle in both cultural and ideological spheresfields. We take the initiative in international economic integration but also have to take the initiative in fighting to keep our distinct culture resisting pro-foreign and cross-bred phenomena, and overcoming the psychology of preferring money over ethical values.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a sustained critical discussion with a clear progression from cultural to economic concerns, and its vocabulary shows considerable ambition. However, it addresses cultural homogenisation only unevenly, broadens into general economic globalisation, and leaves the comparative position partly implicit. The priority is to state clearly why the cited disadvantages outweigh the acknowledged benefits and support that comparison with more specific, directly relevant examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses advantages and several disadvantages, but its comparative position is not explicit and some economic discussion drifts from the specific issue of cultural similarity.
State the extent of agreement directly and develop a focused comparison showing why the disadvantages outweigh the benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through advantages, cultural risks, economic inequality, and a conclusion, although some long sentences weaken the flow within paragraphs.
Break overloaded sentences into clearer units and use referencing more precisely to strengthen connections between claims.
Lexical Resource
A broad vocabulary supports discussion of culture and globalisation, but recurring spelling and collocational problems reduce precision.
Prioritise accurate natural combinations, especially around cultural preservation, unequal benefits, and national identity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures, but agreement, article, punctuation, and clause-control errors recur despite meaning remaining generally clear.
Proofread complex sentences for complete clause boundaries, subject-verb agreement, and accurate article use.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays we can enjoy the same films, fashions, brands, advertisements and TV channels. The evident difference between countries is disappearing. To what extent do you think the disadvantages overweight the advantages of this?
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