Even though globalization affects the world’s economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.
Sample Response
Globalization is such a commonly used term in the twentieth century. It simply means that the world has become integrated economically, socially, politically and culturally through the advances inof technology, transportation and communication. It is undeniable that globalization has resulted in both positive and negative effects which must be addressed accordingly.
FirstSecondly, several companies from the more developed countries have already establishedventured to establish foreign operations or branches to take advantage of the low cost of labor in the poorer countries. This kind of business activity canwill provide a greater influx of cashmore influx of cash or investment funds into the less developed countries.
However, one cannot deny the negative effects that have resulted fromeffects which have derived from globalization. One crucial social concernaspect is the riskrisk and danger of epidemic diseases that can easily spreadwhich can easily be spread as transportationas the transportation becomes easier and faster in today’s advanced society. This is evidenced in the recent bird flubirds flu disease which has infected most Asian countries over a short period of time.
As large corporations invest in or take overinvest or take over many offshore businesses, a modern form of colonization may also emergewill also evolve which may exert political pressure onpose certain power pressure on the local governments of the less developed countries. Unemployment rates in the more developed regions such as Europe may also escalate as corporations choose to outsource to the cheaper work force from Asian countries.
In conclusion. I would like to reiterateI like to reiterate that globalization is inevitable and we must urge individuals, companies and governments to use a more balanced approach by taking the appropriate steps to deal with matters relating to the financial or economiceconomical gains versusverses the social, political or ecological concerns of the world.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response discusses both benefits and drawbacks of globalization with a clear position, relevant examples, and generally logical paragraph progression. Its main limitation is uneven development: the economic benefit receives only brief treatment, while several lexical choices and a few sentence-level errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop the positive side more fully and edit collocations, word forms, and punctuation for consistently accurate expression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses positive and negative effects with a clear balanced conclusion, though the single benefit is less fully developed than the drawbacks.
Extend the economic benefit with a clearer explanation of its wider consequences so both sides receive convincing development.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through focused paragraphs and cohesive devices are generally effective, despite the unexplained opening linker and a few abrupt transitions.
Ensure every sequencing marker matches the surrounding structure and strengthen the link between the positive and negative sections.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of topic-specific and less common vocabulary, with several noticeable collocation, word-form, and spelling lapses.
Edit combinations such as descriptions of investment, disease, and political pressure, and distinguish easily confused word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is used with generally good control, although article use, punctuation, and a few clause constructions contain errors.
Proofread sentence boundaries and articles, especially in the conclusion and complex relative-clause sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Even though globalization affects the world’s economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.
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