As we are facing more and more problems, which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
It is irrefutable that nowadays the whole world has become a global village and communication It is irrefutable that nowadays the whole world has become a global village and communication and trade between different countries is also becoming more frequent than ever before. At the same time, the whole planet is facing problems, such as environmental problemsproblem, terrorism, poverty, and diseaseterrorism and poverty and diseases. In my view, countries cannot solve these problems on their own and national governmentsgovernments of different countries must cooperate to addressfight these problems.
To begin with, considertake environmental problems. It is a serious realitya bitter truth that the Earth facesis facing the problem of global warming and if countries worldwideif the whole world dodoes not unite to addressfight this problem, it will not be long beforethen the day is not far when the planetthe whole Earth will become an uninhabitable placea boiling pot and life willwould not be possible here. The Kyoto protocol has been signed by many countries of the United Nations in which, they have pledged not to make industries, which emit more than 5.2% carbon dioxide.
Furthermore, there are problems such as terrorismproblems like terrorism, which havewhich are having a detrimental effect on our society. There are various global organizations, which are working to eradicateworking towards eradicating these issues but success is impossibleit cannot be possible without trust and harmony between nationsdifferent nations.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear agreement and uses relevant global examples, with the environmental paragraph offering the most substantial support. However, it is under length, the terrorism point is only briefly asserted, and there is no concluding paragraph, so the argument feels incomplete. The highest priority is to extend each main idea with precise explanation and evidence, then close by restating the position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained, but the short response develops only the environmental example adequately and leaves the terrorism point superficial.
Meet the required length by explaining how cooperation addresses each problem and add a conclusion that reinforces the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically through an introduction and two topic-based paragraphs, although the opening repetition and missing conclusion weaken the overall structure.
Remove the duplicated opening text and use a final paragraph to complete the progression of the argument.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but several combinations and word choices are awkward or imprecise.
Use more precise collocations, such as environmental problems and reduce industrial emissions, while avoiding exaggerated phrases like boiling pot.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the main ideas, but recurring agreement, article, plural, and punctuation errors reduce control.
Check noun forms, subject-verb agreement, and comma placement, especially in long sentences with relative clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
As we are facing more and more problems, which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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