It is usually foolish to get married before completing your studies and getting establishment in a good job. Do you agree and disagree?
Sample Response
Marriage is the most important aspect in one’s life. Marriage isThe marriage in not only a relationshipnot only relationship between two peopleof two persons but also tiesbut also it ties two familiestwo two families together.Some people agree that it is not good to get married before finishing studies and getting a good jobgetting good job. I fully agree with this statement and numerous reasonsnumerous of reason behind it.
Firstly, both the life partners are not fully preparedpurposed physically as well as mentally because before completing their studies they are not mature enoughnot enough mature to make their new life successful. Moreover, sometimes girls have some problems adjusting to a new familyproblems to adjust new family. After the marriage, they have more responsibilities toward their in-laws’ familyin-laws family and it is difficult for them to balance their family as well as their studies. As a resultAs result of it they are not able to concentrate fullyable to their fully concentration on studies and household workworks.
Furthermore, if people marryif children married before completing their higher studies and getting stablerenewed job, they are totally dependentthey totally depend on their families. They always take money from both parents for studies and other basic needs. In addition to it, girls face too manymuch restrictions which are imposed on her by in-law family and they have to follow such restriction whether they want to or notwhether she want or not. Sometime they put restriction on her regular studies or doing job outside.
However, nowadays people have changed their attitudes. Theymentality.they have become open-minded. They prefer their daughter-in-lawthere daughter inlaw to continue her studies and workcontinue their studies further study as well as job.
To conclude, early marriage inhibits the overall growth of both the genders because of this they do not understand each other very well and conflicts take place.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response states a clear position and offers several relevant reasons concerning maturity, study responsibilities, and financial dependence. Paragraphing gives the essay a visible structure, but ideas are unevenly developed and pervasive grammar and word-choice errors frequently strain clarity. The most important improvement is to build two focused arguments with specific explanation, then revise every sentence for basic agreement, articles, pronouns, and natural vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear opinion and relevant reasons, but development is limited, some claims focus narrowly on women, and the brief opposing point is not integrated.
Develop two balanced reasons with specific consequences or examples and explain how the opposing point affects, or fails to change, the position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has recognisable paragraphs and an overall line of argument, but mechanical linking, unclear references, and the isolated however paragraph weaken progression.
Give each body paragraph one clear controlling idea and connect the counterpoint explicitly to the main argument before concluding.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers the topic adequately, but frequent spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make several expressions unnatural or difficult to interpret.
Use simpler accurate phrases such as secure job, mature enough, and concentrate fully, and check every noun and verb form.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, pronouns, plurals, and sentence formation regularly reduce clarity.
Prioritise accurate basic sentence patterns and systematically check subject-verb agreement, articles, and pronoun consistency in every sentence.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is usually foolish to get married before completing your studies and getting establishment in a good job. Do you agree and disagree?
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